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AH! OMG! I JUS WANTED TO REVIEW AGAIN AND TELL YOU HOW much I AM IN LOVE WITH THIS STORY, AND TWO THING THOUGH. I NOTICED THIS ALL THROUGHOUT THE STORY BUT YOU'RE MISSING COMMAS. WHENEVER SOMEONE TALKS TO SOMEONE directly USING THEIR NAME, A COMMA comes BEFORE THAT NAME. SO when Asher goes, "Come on Muffin." A comma is needed in front of Muffin. And like "Hey Kiddo." - a comma belongs in front of kiddo... Yeah I noticed this a bunch of times throughout and finally am telling ya. Also, a comma is needed to connect two complete clauses or sentences that are connected with the word "and." The comma comes before the word "and." I noticed you missed this part too. SO anyways, I WANTED TO CORRECT YOU AND PLEASE PLEASE DON'T LET US WAIT TOO LONG FOR THE MUCH ANTICIPATED follow up to this

I really hope there's a sequel to this in the future! I would love to read more~ This story was great! x3

Since I am in a Muffin withdrawal panic mode I thought I would throw another idea out to you. Yes, my brilliant idea no. 2 and counting. How about if Matthew/Muffin gets involved with another Asher type character but this one is really really bad. Then Muffin will need help and who else but our Asher, Vincenzo and Alrick to the rescue.

Hahahaha why is Asher so angry?

Chapter 16:
“They want me to spy on you,” I whispered.

“By all means,” the smooth voice purred.

Bazinga!

Hi I was so glad to find out you updated but I'd be lying if I said theending was enough for me :(
I of course understand how time consuming it is and you're right, you're not making any money off it (though I actually do believe if you really want to you could you have the talent for that). I'd personally rather wait and wait if only to know that there'll be a sequal. I mean Muffin really touched my heart and I think it[d be a shame to let his story go. So I really do hope you continue it and very much look forward to new stories from you as well. Thank you so much fro sharing your writing with us :)

OMG Mahsa please do not leave us like this!! WHAT HAPPENED! Love your story and how deep it was. We all knew it would never work out but that did not keep us from badly wanting it to. A sequel could be of how after losing everything in court but spending a few years behind bars for petty crimes his lawyers could not get him acquitted for, tracks down Matthew. Matthew now a few years older, and a few years wiser works towards forgiveness but there are more than a few bumps along the way... Le sigh I am such a bad romantic. Thanks again for the great story, one of my all time favs, and I've read my fair share of fics. Now if we can only get Monsoon to update the world would be in right order again.

Me yet again and I just had a brainstorm to send your way for consideration when you do write the sequel to Muffin.
Maybe Matthew/Muffin could open a muffin shop and yes call it "muffin's breakfast and coffee shop" or something on that idea. He knows something about diner's thanks to Anna and Zack's place. It would be a way for Asher to find him again. Just a thought. I will patiently wait and be on the lookout for the sequel. Thanks for deciding to write it when you have the time.

One-shot sequel! Please please PLEASE! I'm begging you! I'm down on my friggin knees begging you. For the love of Muffin PLEASE! Just a quick, simple one-shot to tie everything up and give us some resolution! (and please don't let that tempt you to kill everyone just to shut me up, please, I'll be good)

I really hope you don't end the story there. I just found the story and read it all the way through in two nights. I was hooked. I feel in love with the characters and felt very bereft after the way it ended. Just a couple chapters more and you could have given your readers closure. Just by the number of reviews you've averaged per chapter shows that you've got a great following. On average, the stories on this site probably receive an average of 4 reviews per chapter, if they are lucky. You've received an average of over 25. May not seem like much to you, but compared to the stories out there, that's pretty good. So, you owe it to your faithful readers to at least give us an end to the story. We understand that you don't make money and we understand that extra time is hard to come by. We are willing to wait if you at least tell us that you'll give us an ending and not leave the story so open ended. I hope you won't be offended by my comments. I wouldn't be so passionate about this if I didn't truly love the story and the characters. They've all wrapped themselves around my heart so much that I felt my heart break with the ending. Not a lot of authors have the ability to do that. You, my friend, not only did it to me, but all the other people out there who've commented as well. You are very talented and I hope you won't leave us disappointed.

HOW CAN YOU END THE STORY LIKE THAT???
What sort of an ending is that!
At least show us Asher will forgive Matthew.....
Both of them living in hell of hate and hell of guilt is NOT GOOD.
Gosh. I am desperately in need of a resolution here.... my emotions can't take so much angst without a resolution.... Ah! Save me! You have the power to write a sequel! PLEASE!!