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for Dandruff

by Munez

person naviarex
schedule January 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Phoenix makes one shiver! Temperamental yet mature.
The faux sex scene with Felicity was great. I want to see more sparks fly!!!
person Rosei
schedule January 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
The dude totally deserved having a giant hole
burned into each and everyone of his fancy boxers,
he was sooooooo mean!!!!!
person Anon
schedule January 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
very funny :)
the conversations in the story ran smoothly
make another one quick :O
schedule January 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I'm loving this story more and more! I think that this could turn into something delcious and that you should continue for me you know! I can't wait to see how the bathroom scene afterwards plays out. As stated before keep up the good work, and crank out those chapters!!!!
person Anon
schedule January 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
phoenix is a realy dumb name.
but all man who're gay and are hiding behind a woman are dumb&despised.
i thinks felicity should use a drill, then a chainsaw on her beloved faithfull husband.
she's doing something that no other female character in slash stories ever did-provokes female solidarity in making the bastard pay.

so phoenix is a moron witha moronic name.
i still like the kid, though.
but wait, he did what?
he fell for soem bronzed blond guy?
first of all, i hate all bronzed man who dye their hair blond(jesus, sun bleached hair is even worse)
i bet he has one of those teeth that shine in the dark too*snickers*

so please make the kid fall for ol' phoenix real fast cause grumpy thickheaded ppl of male gender should totaly pair up a.s.a.p and get out of my hair.
write more soon.

schedule January 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I don't hate Brett. I seems like an interesting character that is definitely going to add a spicy dynamic. Glad to see Phoenix's jealous side it is really quite amusing.
person Jayde Alyxandre
schedule January 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Ha. I love it. Brett is great. hehe. I love slutty Jacob. Phoenix is pissed, I love it. Great chapter. Thanks for the update. and the smut. ;)
schedule January 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
W.O.W
That was amazing!
I'm loving this story!
Keep up the good work!
:)
person wynja
schedule January 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
"“No… But I think my eye’s glued shut…” " = LOL!
Ah, I loved this... twitching eye... *grin* Jealosy is such a wonderful thing...
person K.Blood
schedule January 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Jacob and Brett coming out of the bathroom together, and Jacob with that smug look on his face. How is Phoenix going to handle this?

I think Phoenix should surprise Brett from behind, beat him up, then drag Jacob to his room and spank him (because he's been bad ^_~). But that's just my opinion.

A good chapter. I'll be excitedly waiting for the next one.