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Oh my God!!!!! I love you! I love you! I love you! I love you! You are back! I'm so damn happy! I could just kiss you at the moment! I can't tell you how you made my day with your updates! And so many chappys! Now on to the chappies. Aoras shapeshiftig was absoloutly fantastic! He is so HOT I want to keep him ^^ And the end was so funny when he askes Rial how to move in this body! That had me on the floor laughing ^^ And again we get to meet Kunuaenah! I really like her! And now we get more and more forces gathering to defeat Hammer. I really like the merman and I can't wait to see him in his true form! Oh I so want to read more! I hope that you will update this wonderful story soon! Cause I am just toally in love with this story! I so glad that you didn't abandon this story!! It's just the best story ever ^^ See you again soon!!!

No problem! I just have good memory even of some stories years ago! Thanks also for the new chapter and the new fix in chapter 8!!!! Hope you have a wonderful week!

I finally got to read this chapter and all I have to say is wooha that was totally amazing and awesome. To finally have the bulk of all of them together for this war is like wow very impressive. I loved the description of the merpeople nice touch there. I thought it was totally adorable when little Cessnal raced over to save his big Uncle that was hilarious and how Rial and Aoras finally found out that everyone knows how they feel towards eachother another nice touch. And the fun when the sister and brother came to straighten out their bull headed siblings totally priceless with that one. It's hard for me to remember everything I liked but I totally liked the chapter although parts of it got me a little confused so I had to reread it which is always my pleasure to do so because than I get to experience the thrill of reading it again. God I love this story and I have missed it so much. I can't wait to see what happens next. Could you kind of let me know the next time you write a chapter again my email is brzachman@yahoo.com if your to busy though I totally understand. Unfortunately it's getting to late to read the next chapter till tomorrow but trust me I will. Thank you from the bottom of my heart for updating you totally are great.

Fuck yeah! I love this story! I am so glad that you are taking it back up. Just know that the first chapter looks like it is all one paragraph. Other than that, I am SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO HAPPY!

I reread this story again just to refresh my memory before reading the new chapter and noticed that the section that mentioned kinjou becoming a new druid and causing a new forest to grow fast from the garden Makshahariass placed him in was missing in chapter 7. What happened? The next chapters after this did mentioned the new forest, especially the new forest in Makshahariass' room, too. Please fix the missing section. Thanks!

I am finally caught up! You have a lot of characters here and it is difficult to remember all of them, but the story itself is quite interesting. You can probably weave the plot better if/when you edit it but overall it is a nice read.

Nice story overall. Your characters have very interesting personalities. Cessnal is a definite cutie and so adorable. Keevorass is a big softy and also one of my favorite.

It does have some grammatical and spelling mistakes which could be fixed later on when you edit it. It might also help if you reorder some of the paragraphs to make it flow better. I just finished reading chapter 6, and I got lost in terms of the sequence of events partway through.

Anyway, I'll read on now.

Chapter 8

That is quite the influx of new characters. Let's hope I remember them all, or most of them at least. Also, you really should consider giving your characters shorter names! lol

Wow! More intrigue, avatar and naga bumping like bunnies, and Kinjou's new powers made this such a fun read.

Only comment again would be the use of pronouns. You use "he" quite a bit without telling who the "he" pertains to. You have a tendency to say he something something and then say the name later. For example, at one point in this chapter (10) you were telling how Maksha talked to Keevorass and Askan after his mindlink with Kinjou. Then in the next paragraph, you started with "he" so I thought you were still talking about Maksha but when you said that the character was not a jewel Naga I figured it was somebody else (Askan). You should flip it and have the noun before the pronoun so that readers can easily tell who you are talking about.

I totally forgot about those two. Well, it serves them right being offered up to an octopus as punishment for trying to harm our protagonists here.