rate_review Reviews

Incredibly exciting. Had I experienced this when working at my scout camp I probably would have stayed on a lot longer.
Look forward to more updates, even more so with Tiger and Brandon, who I found easy to relate to.

I have to say, you have picked the perfect setting for this adventure to unfold!
I think that the dialogue should have a space between each line, that way it is easier to read.
Other than that, please continue, I really enjoyed reading it!
XOXO

Thanks for the review everyone, I greatly appreciate them! Not sure if this is the right way to respond to them (Kinda new on this site), but I wanted to say thank you! I am trying to update regularly, and definitely taking your feedback to heart! At this point, I am pushing forward... so the story will grow and evolve over time, both in details and in writing style as I find the best way to do it. I had originally just written these characters as bodies to use for the sex scenes (God that sounds awful, doesn't it? lol) but they have grown on me a bit, and I am looking forward to fleshing them out more as the story progresses. I think the two central figures at this point will be Jacob and Jen, and I want to build up a lot of sexual tension between them... which they may or may not even act upon (OK, who am I kidding here! But I'm still gonna hold off for as long as I can!). If anybody has any characters they would like to see developed, and/or pairings they might like to see, please let me know! I know I'm not really great at this, but I'm sure having fun writing it, and I would love to see how it pans out... thank you so much for reviewing! I can't wait to see what else you have to say!

I liked it. Of course I worked at a Cub Scout camp for a year and the experience was similar in that first chapter. Not so much in the second lol. The second chapter did seem a little forced, but you'll get better as you keep writing. Keep it up.

Good start! I'm interested to see each personality develop and who ultimately gets paired up with who. Keep it up! :)