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November 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hey! I hope everything is going ok and you haven't abandoned this story. I've been checking twice a week since the last update, so I'm sure you can imagine this last month has been torture. I've been entertaining myself by re-reading the story over and over, but hopefully I'll have some new material soon right? :D I'm addicted to your work so I really hope you plan on continuing.
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November 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
update?
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November 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I reviewed this chap before under a different name (can't remember what I used). Anyway, I think your story is great, and I just wanted to encourage you to update. We're all waiting anxiously for the next chapter, so (poke, poke) hurry up and update! Please!
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November 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I have only review once :S I need to review more :/
Today I was so bored so I read it yet again (for the 10th time or maybe more), to see how maybe days has Devin been living in Keeran's house (if I'm right, its hard to believe it has only being around a month O__O), and I felt like I should tell you a couple of errors that I found after reading it many times. (Maybe others have told you about it, if so, please ignore this :S). It has to do with the time of the day, I only found 2 on chapter 10. The first time it is on the beginning of the chapter, Devin says: ''In the morning I was feeling horrible'', but then, a little farther Keeran says: ''How many of my men have you f***ed tonight?” (I censored just in case). There wasn't any change of scene or anything. The next one is later on the chapter, Devin says: ''My eyes searched for the window automatically and I was astonished to find it was dark outside. Had I slept through the day?''. Then Snake takes him to the garden, and Devin says: ''My breathing hitched and I stumbled when the man pulled me away from the door until we were in a sunny spot to the side of it''. Maybe I reading it wrong, sometimes I don't read it right. But the thing is, they can't be changed, because it would change the scene :/ So, its better to leave them like that XD
Also, something I noticed is that Devin has never smiled and no one mentions it. I think Keeran has tried, but I know it will be difficult for Devin to do so :(
And the last thing. For a while now, I decided that of all the fics that I'm reading (that I'm waiting for new chapters), around 50 or more, this one, Forgotten, is my favorite. There is no doubt about it. Everyday I read something of it, and I never get tired. I just LOVE it. THANK YOU so much for writing it. And I hope you can update soon. :)
Today I was so bored so I read it yet again (for the 10th time or maybe more), to see how maybe days has Devin been living in Keeran's house (if I'm right, its hard to believe it has only being around a month O__O), and I felt like I should tell you a couple of errors that I found after reading it many times. (Maybe others have told you about it, if so, please ignore this :S). It has to do with the time of the day, I only found 2 on chapter 10. The first time it is on the beginning of the chapter, Devin says: ''In the morning I was feeling horrible'', but then, a little farther Keeran says: ''How many of my men have you f***ed tonight?” (I censored just in case). There wasn't any change of scene or anything. The next one is later on the chapter, Devin says: ''My eyes searched for the window automatically and I was astonished to find it was dark outside. Had I slept through the day?''. Then Snake takes him to the garden, and Devin says: ''My breathing hitched and I stumbled when the man pulled me away from the door until we were in a sunny spot to the side of it''. Maybe I reading it wrong, sometimes I don't read it right. But the thing is, they can't be changed, because it would change the scene :/ So, its better to leave them like that XD
Also, something I noticed is that Devin has never smiled and no one mentions it. I think Keeran has tried, but I know it will be difficult for Devin to do so :(
And the last thing. For a while now, I decided that of all the fics that I'm reading (that I'm waiting for new chapters), around 50 or more, this one, Forgotten, is my favorite. There is no doubt about it. Everyday I read something of it, and I never get tired. I just LOVE it. THANK YOU so much for writing it. And I hope you can update soon. :)
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October 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hi T,
How r u doing? ye, me again! :D
I missed Devin again! so I read the whole story, once more! :D
and you know what? I figured out that somewhere through my babbling and talking and ... I lost one big factor! and that's fear! how could I not paying any attention????!!! O.o I was so lost in wanting-to-everything-work-out-for-both-of-them, that I really forgot everything about fear! and what that can do to one!
sigh
No, it's not gonna work! :( As long as Devin is scared of Keeran and as long as Keeran is going to act like this, everything is going to get worse! :( Maybe Keeran is as blind as me! :P but no! He saw the fear in Devin's eyes after the going-out-to-the-garden incident in the bath! he was pretty angry with himself! but really he is not putting any effort to get Devin's trust! not that he could get it easily, if at all possible! @.@
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With that said, I want to say something else! I have a really hard time figuring Keeran right now! The guy is powerful and handsome. He is living with his nephew alone! No wife, no girl friend! Very odd for a rich, handsome, powerful guy!!!! O.o
He is alone! a very lonely guy! otherwise, he wouldn't spend his nights with Devin! and he wants to be loved! He doesn't want just-fuck-someone-and-hell-to-whatever-happen-to-him-next! Not like his men that had come, satisfied themselves and left! He wants Devin to be with him! enjoy it! ...
why?!
I think while he wants this, at the same time he feels vulnerable, exposed, ... that's why he wants to play the big bad master! but he cares! he has started to care a lot! but it makes him mad to not be in control! in control of Devin! as much as he wants! but Devin cries! Keeran failed yet again! but he is not suppose to be weak, so he got mad! and treat the way he does with poor Devin!
Am I out of it?! lol is that all my imagination or is it really happening?!
Keeran must start to show that he cares, IN THE RIGHT WAY! not in a scary way!
and Gush, for God sakes, give the poor child a little break!
lol, but if he do, we are not going to have this much fun (eee, is this a right word?!) with this story. lol ;)
Anyway, if you don't to hear from me and my crazy thought, update soon! :P
How r u doing? ye, me again! :D
I missed Devin again! so I read the whole story, once more! :D
and you know what? I figured out that somewhere through my babbling and talking and ... I lost one big factor! and that's fear! how could I not paying any attention????!!! O.o I was so lost in wanting-to-everything-work-out-for-both-of-them, that I really forgot everything about fear! and what that can do to one!
sigh
No, it's not gonna work! :( As long as Devin is scared of Keeran and as long as Keeran is going to act like this, everything is going to get worse! :( Maybe Keeran is as blind as me! :P but no! He saw the fear in Devin's eyes after the going-out-to-the-garden incident in the bath! he was pretty angry with himself! but really he is not putting any effort to get Devin's trust! not that he could get it easily, if at all possible! @.@
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With that said, I want to say something else! I have a really hard time figuring Keeran right now! The guy is powerful and handsome. He is living with his nephew alone! No wife, no girl friend! Very odd for a rich, handsome, powerful guy!!!! O.o
He is alone! a very lonely guy! otherwise, he wouldn't spend his nights with Devin! and he wants to be loved! He doesn't want just-fuck-someone-and-hell-to-whatever-happen-to-him-next! Not like his men that had come, satisfied themselves and left! He wants Devin to be with him! enjoy it! ...
why?!
I think while he wants this, at the same time he feels vulnerable, exposed, ... that's why he wants to play the big bad master! but he cares! he has started to care a lot! but it makes him mad to not be in control! in control of Devin! as much as he wants! but Devin cries! Keeran failed yet again! but he is not suppose to be weak, so he got mad! and treat the way he does with poor Devin!
Am I out of it?! lol is that all my imagination or is it really happening?!
Keeran must start to show that he cares, IN THE RIGHT WAY! not in a scary way!
and Gush, for God sakes, give the poor child a little break!
lol, but if he do, we are not going to have this much fun (eee, is this a right word?!) with this story. lol ;)
Anyway, if you don't to hear from me and my crazy thought, update soon! :P
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October 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I am really enjoying this story. I feel so sorry for poor Devin. I just want to cry right along with him sometimes. I read your other story "Pain and Pain?" and it was great too. I usually don't like first person stories, but you do such a good job with them. I think this is some of the best first person writing I've ever read. I really hope you update soon. I've been checking every day for an update. Please, please, please update as soon as you can. I can't wait to find out what happens to Devin. Also, I was wondering, what happened to Ronan? Did he just give up on Devin? Why hasn't he tried to help him again?
Can't wait for more!!!
Can't wait for more!!!
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October 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
=( Awwwww... poor sad panda Jason... I really hope one day he'll be able to get past the emotional pain that having to cum causes him when he's with Keeran... I mean, I can understand how he feels now, but I want him to be happy some day! XD lol
Just realized you updated the story, that's why it took me so long to review XD I can't WAIT for the next update matey!!!! *bounces*
Just realized you updated the story, that's why it took me so long to review XD I can't WAIT for the next update matey!!!! *bounces*
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October 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Great new chapter! I'm glad you were able to update so soon (even though it's taken me forever to review). I can imagine that things are harder for D. now that K. wants him to forget his training, but he knows nothing else on top of the fact that I hardly think he even knows what K. wants. - talk about stressful. And then K. goes and throws emotional connection into the mix...I wonder if he realizes he's breaking D. more or if it'll take his complete collapse for the man to notice. I'm anxious to see where this goes so please update soon again.
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October 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I've been following this story for a good while. And although it is not my usual type of read, I'm enjoying it. To be honest, I don't know if this story has a "happy" ending, don't know if that's what you've planned. Frankly, it's getting more difficult to see something other than pain, uncertainty, illness, fear, and isolation for Devin. There's been glimpse's of kindness and deeper emotion, and that's good. But, can Kieran really be so un-mindful of what Devin's been through, and love him? Is it possible for Devin to love someone, who has caused you such physical pain and fear? Despite what Master may do for him, I think that will always be in Devin's mind - wondering when Master will flip on him. Snake has not been Mary Sunshine to Devin either, however, he has never directly hurt him. Perhaps this is why he seems to be easier with Snake. For someone accustomed to beeing abused and hurt, someone who simply does not do these things is enough for them.
Thank you for such a well written story. :)
Thank you for such a well written story. :)
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October 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I have to admit that I don't usually like these kinds of stories, but, this one was great.
I have read all of your chapters and I like how the emotional detachment from Devin is giving his 'care takers' a better view of what was done to him. I like how you have given him a reliance on someone, other than himself. I cannot wait to see how his emotional state plays out in later chapters, and I really want to know if everything will be resolved between his care takers and him.
I have read all of your chapters and I like how the emotional detachment from Devin is giving his 'care takers' a better view of what was done to him. I like how you have given him a reliance on someone, other than himself. I cannot wait to see how his emotional state plays out in later chapters, and I really want to know if everything will be resolved between his care takers and him.