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Love the weekly updates! And as always and forever, the story has been wonderful to follow!
Thank you, Thank you!
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THANK YOU so much for the update. You're already super amazing and awesome for writing the wonderful stories that you do, and being willing to share them with all of us (for free, I might add). Weekly updates just puts you even more over the top (I really hope you can keep them up, too. It just makes my day to see that you've updated Forgotten.) I love Devin; he's adorable. I can't wait to find out what happens next and how his relationship with Keeran, and Snake, will progress. Looking forward to your next update (which will hopefully [*fingerscrossedandknockingonwood*] be next week).

My selfishness wants me to scream at you to HURRY UP AND FINISH THE STORY!!! But that is only because this story is that good and I am anxious to know what happens next. I started reading this story without know who the author was, but as soon as I started I knew it was you. From Pain ...Pain, it had the same feeling. You really are a talented writer. I don't usually go for torture stories but you make me love all of the characters that are meant to be loved. I really am enjoying this story and can't wait for the next update (I rarely read incomplete stories but that is how good you are)

I like this story, I really do. I usually can't take much of these types because they get WAY too angsty, but yours is just enough of the right kind of angst. There have been a few things I would change, but this is your story to do with as you please. The only things that I feel are truly wrong with it are grammar/spelling mistakes, of which there aren't many per chapter, and a few details that would be nice to see, such as:

What does Keeran do for a living? Is he a mob boss? A businessman with gang connections? An independent entity? You could get this across subtly with a possible phone call that Devin overhears or maybe a business meeting with a fellow businessman or a group of subordinates. Or any other way you want.

Where are all the group members throughout the day? Such as during the time Snake is leading Devin to breakfast/therapy/the garden. Are they at work? Do they live on a different side of the house? Do they not even live in the house? Did Keeran tell them to stay out of view of Devin?

Are we gonna see Ronan again? Does he have school? Is he constantly being watched by goons? Is he secretly trying to find Devin? (Side questions: What happened to his parents? Does he know about his uncle's (possible) mob connections?)

Is the doctor a mob doctor or Keeran's personal one?

Does Snake have other duties?

These are just some questions I feel would give your story depth if you answer them throughout your chapters. Of course, these are just suggestions that you don't have to feel the need to follow if you already have different plans for the plot details. I don't want you to feel that you HAVE to go with my suggestions. :)

Also, if you still want/need a beta, I wouldn't mind beta-ing for you. You can contact me through the forum (same username as here) or email (which can be found on my forum account). :)

Lovely new chapter Traxie. Keeran is such an ox. It will take him a long time for him to be gentle with Devin. He probably needs to learn to ask questions first in all of his dealings. On the other hand, it will take such a long time for Devin to be able to fend for himself. He does need to have a strong protector. I loved the scene with Devin and the pillow.It made me want to reach in and give him a hug of my own. Thanks for working so hard on the story. I can't wait to see another chapter of this story. It is one of the first stories I read when I discovered AFF, so Devin is very special to me. I have been worrying about him for two years now. Keep up the good work.

this definitely my fav story
still interesting as always, still want to read more

Really glad to read the new chapter. I really think that Keeran just love the boy too much but does know yet what to do with the boy mental. Just can't wait to read more. Always support you. ^^

eyes definitely watered, but no tears again!! yay!! :D although I am worried that Keeran will misinterpret the boy's concern for Snake : / bah...i hope not. really enjoyed it :) hope you get over your flu!!

Another great chapter ! Thank you ! And thank you to be regular with your updates too ! You made my day... :))
Poor Devin ! His new master's always hurting him ! He's not really a bad man like the boy's former master but he's not really good either...
Give a break to the wretched boy, please...
Have you ever think about a chapter with Keeran POV ? What does he think of Devin ?
Again, thanks for the update ! Can't wait for more...

He hit him...once again...:(
Keeran acts like a friggin dog, who wakes up, finding his favourite
bone/toy is gone and snaps. He deserves a good slap.
Poor Devin, he gets dragged from one room to another. And now he is
in the biggest room. But, of what avail is it? It`s still a cage.
I knew it, Keeran is jealous of Snake. Hm, maybe not really jealous, but he
notices the way Devin clings to him, how he depends on him. And he`s thinking about Devins
past with Oskar and Generalli. I hope he sees the parallels...
Love your story,Jules