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I really liked this chapter, it was good. Victoria isn't the smartest person though, Thamar was right after the spider attacked her wouldn't she have thought that their could be worse things in a forest? And I find it a little harsh that Revaz dosen't really care about the fact that she was almost raped, it's only about his reputation. Although he acts cold towards Victoria I though he cared more about her. And yes I know she attacked him at the hospital but still... anyways really good chapter, I wasn't expecting that so very well done.

I wish you would update sooner!

Been following this for a while but had to catch up with the last 3 chapters. Love your story so far. I like your character's personalities and the plot has really gotten interesting since Victoria was brought to the other planet. I'm interested to see what happens next between the couple and what awaits them when they get back to the city. Can't wait for the next update! :)

Once again, I am astounded by how resistant to learning Victoria is. You would think after all that she wouldn't be surprised by Revaz's harsh behavior. If she's going to act like a spoiled brat, she ought to be treated like one. I wonder what her issue is.

Also, I am dying to find out what's going to happen to Revaz for attacking Thamar. Eeek! As always, let me know if I can be of help in proofreading.

Emilie

With each new chapter I think, "I can't possibly be more emotionally invested in this story than I already am." And with each new chapter, you continue to prove me wrong.

I have to wonder what it is that is holding Victoria back--clearly she desires the intimacy and reciprocal love that Andrea and Tariel share, yet with every glance from Revaz she seems only to run further from him. After all, Revaz did say that he loves her. Unless he was simply saying what he knew would make her feel better, why did that not strike a chord with her?

And likewise, I am befuddled at why Revaz chose her in the first place. After all, it wasn't like he didn't have an entire planet from which to choose a mate. He is endlessly frustrated by her behavior, yet he chose her. It would definitely lead one to question his motives. As a very rational being, it wouldn't follow that he just chose the first woman of child-bearing ability that he met.

Perhaps it would behoove them both to take a step back and look at their motives. I think it might bring them both to a greater realm of understanding (where the other is concerned) when Revaz remembers why he picked her, and Victoria thinks about what is causing her to not even give Revaz a chance.

Excellent job, as always. If you want a proofreader and/or beta, I have extensive experience in such things (as well as being a "Spelling and Grammar Nazi"). Clearly you don't need plot help, but I know it's always nice to have a second pair of eyes to catch typos before posting online.


Emilie

I binge read this story last night. I love it it is dramatic. I hate spiders, i got chills when i came across that part in the story. I also wonder why he went crazy when she masturbated? I know he said it was unnatural, but i do not get it exactly. Anyways love this story, it is very original.

Great, as usual! Though I have to say... You seem to be... letting go of your characters a little? I don't feel for them as I did in previous chapters. Especially Revaz. Maybe it's because of the big personality change since the start, but I dunno. On average, both of them are quite confusing. I can't tell how they really feel for each other. Anyway, can't wait for the next chapter!

Still reading and still loving it. Your characterizations are brilliant, and I can't wait to see them develop more fully. Poor Victoria's naivety and immaturity is really making life hard for her. Still, it's realistic as far as many 19-year-olds nowadays. I wonder what it will take for her to grow up some more.

Wow, so many things has happened so far. I'm not sure how I feel.

Well with him not leaving her side and smelling his scent srtonger, one can only wonder if she is pregnant or not. He would know so he would be really watchful, and the smell is only a common side effect of pregnancy...