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March 22, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Good story, but there are a lot of spelling errors. I did a proofread of it and fixed up the mistakes. I can send it to you if you want.
But again, it was definitely a good read.
But again, it was definitely a good read.
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January 17, 2010 at 12:00 AM
add more. do another chapter.
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December 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
To be entirely honest with you I think you could really benefit from a beta to clean up some of the grammar and maybe add some detail here and there. Now after having said that, I really like what you've done here and I really hope to see you continue the story. It's a very interesting concept and definitely sets up a strong foundation for more.
The brother/sister incest you have going is very hot, and personally I would like to see the sister knocked up by her brother and/or Ivy. Maybe give birth to some kind of plant human hybrid. Ivy is also a great character and I'm looking forward to seeing where you take her character.
Great stuff all around! Please keep writing!
The brother/sister incest you have going is very hot, and personally I would like to see the sister knocked up by her brother and/or Ivy. Maybe give birth to some kind of plant human hybrid. Ivy is also a great character and I'm looking forward to seeing where you take her character.
Great stuff all around! Please keep writing!
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November 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Sick twisted wet yummmmmmmmmmmmy Oh gosh what a slutty smuty thing you got XDDDD!! Love it, you did well a few type-os but great story plot smuty *100* points..and the chick turned in her best friend for a good fuck!! Hahaha!!!!