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April 25, 2011 at 12:00 AM
can't wait for the 3rd chapter... the encounters are all very HOT!
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June 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Interesting idea, I hope you'll decide to update.
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December 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
*whistles and winks* gang banging!
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November 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
so need chapter 3!
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November 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OMG!!!!! This made me so hott XD Don't stop updating!!! And if you dun do anymore PWP(sp?) I'll still read/review this stoy ^^ You wont lose me! lol
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November 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I need consistency in details and you lost me a couple of times. At one point you have the brunette fucking the ass and then coming in the mouth - did I miss the change around or did you get the details confused? At the end, again, the brunette leaves first but then the brunette's shoes are being kissed.
I hate being the bad guy, but if you want people to keep reading your stuff, you're going to have to pay a bit more attention to those pesky little details.
I hate being the bad guy, but if you want people to keep reading your stuff, you're going to have to pay a bit more attention to those pesky little details.
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November 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
One word comes to mind ready this DROOOL.
:P Keep up the good job :D
:P Keep up the good job :D
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November 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
The complete absence of lube and preperation strikes me as at least as fictional as the one of condoms, but for the sake of a beautiful PWP I can roll with that. XD One thing maybe, since it was too dark to see a thing, sounds should be even more important and the guy couldn't have been *completely* silent throughout the whole thing, right? In any case, at least at the end it would be nice to know what his voice is like (though that I might just be me).
Great beginning, can't wait to read more! :)
Great beginning, can't wait to read more! :)