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for A Forbidden Love

by MissKitty316

person Juana13
schedule April 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
hahahaha hilarious!! can't wait for that "fuck into next week." lol
looking forward to more : )
person Akay
schedule December 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
So far so good. Just work on your POV switches to make it more clearer or separate them with them with some sort of symbol so we can know when it switches from Tobi to Jack and vice versa.

Other than that I'm really enjoying your story. So please do continue. You write well. Take care.
person Colandra
schedule November 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Just re-read the story! You might need to put something between the changes of POV. An (*) or something because it sorta gets kinda confusing. But, I really really love this story! Update soon please!
person Colandra
schedule November 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That. Was. So. Hot. I liked how fast passed this story is! Great work