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October 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
this story sounds hot an nothing like that even happened. Damn! i say run witrh it an see where it takes u cause i like it so far. :)
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October 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Looks like you've got a good start.
I'm looking forward for the next chapters.
I'm looking forward for the next chapters.
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October 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ooooh. I love vampy fics. This has an intriguing opening. Looking forward to more. MC
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October 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
constructive criticism:
you can actually see it. as the chapter progresses the descriptions get shorter and shorter. just a thought. maybe it's like this because it's the first chapter after all. but yeah. more descriptive narrative would be nice.
you can actually see it. as the chapter progresses the descriptions get shorter and shorter. just a thought. maybe it's like this because it's the first chapter after all. but yeah. more descriptive narrative would be nice.