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June 5, 2015 at 12:00 AM
Finished reading! I loved it. Really wonderful job! Xoxo Robin
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June 4, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I'm on chapter 65, and I had to pause to review and tell you how truly amazing this story is. I have to recommend it to other people. The smut is amazing but so are the interpersonal relationships. I'm very impressed. Xoxo Robin
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August 26, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Oh my goodness O.O
So I've just finished reading this amazingly brilliant story of yours and I'm so so happy I randomly came across it while looking through some stories on here. I fell in love with so many of these characters, you've developed them excellently and I'm honestly so impressed with how thoroughly planned out the entire story seemed to have been. Things that happened early on became extremely relevant towards the end and I know how challenging that can be. Everything came together perfectly and I loved the way it ended as well.. I was so hoping they would all end up together towards the end and I can't tell you how ecstatic I was to see it actually happen :D
This was honestly such a beautiful story and I looked forward to reading everything else you have on here ;)
I was wondering.. Have you ever gotten to writing that sequel? I'm dying to see how successful they are with their planned future and I would honestly pay to read it.. Were you able to publish any of your stories? Do you have a website??
I'm very much looking forward to seeing more from you.. Again kudos to you for writing such an amazing story and for executing it so perfectly :)
Sincerely,
Emily. S
So I've just finished reading this amazingly brilliant story of yours and I'm so so happy I randomly came across it while looking through some stories on here. I fell in love with so many of these characters, you've developed them excellently and I'm honestly so impressed with how thoroughly planned out the entire story seemed to have been. Things that happened early on became extremely relevant towards the end and I know how challenging that can be. Everything came together perfectly and I loved the way it ended as well.. I was so hoping they would all end up together towards the end and I can't tell you how ecstatic I was to see it actually happen :D
This was honestly such a beautiful story and I looked forward to reading everything else you have on here ;)
I was wondering.. Have you ever gotten to writing that sequel? I'm dying to see how successful they are with their planned future and I would honestly pay to read it.. Were you able to publish any of your stories? Do you have a website??
I'm very much looking forward to seeing more from you.. Again kudos to you for writing such an amazing story and for executing it so perfectly :)
Sincerely,
Emily. S
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March 5, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 1-79. Wow. This story is so full of heart wrenching love, betrayal and misunderstandings. I love how the story played out. Even though you have published Broken Wings (I can't wait to get it on my Nook this coming Friday!) I love it. All the characters have grown on me and I would love to read a story on Zaiden. Even though he was the antagonist in the story, he's really grown on me. Beautiful beautiful story. I can't wait to read the published version! Thank you very much for writing such a beautiful story! Keep writing more beautiful stories of your enchanting world! As a your reading fan, I greatly appreciate and enjoy your stories!
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December 26, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Hi,
I immensely enjoyed this story and would think it sad to have scenes dropped, but agree that the end sort of rattles me a little. I believe that is because this is the only time in the whole story where the acting persons think realistically about their long time future/career, while all the time before they just sort of take one step at a time and only think about the immediate consequences or implications of their decisions and feelings.
I think it might make the whole last dialogue a little more off hand by adding just another much less realistic suggestion, e.g.
Akitra: "I think I can do better. We could just a dragon and elope to some back-water planet. We pretend to have kidnapped Maica, buy us a herb and healing shop from the ransom money, change our names, and live happily ever after."
For a second, there was silence, and then Akitra laughed, a deep, rich, very-pleased-with-his-own-joke chuckle. Jak and Maika glanced at each other.
Jak said drily: "Or that."
Maica snorted: "Whatever. We will work out something"
Suddenly Jak couldn't hide his grin anymore. Whatever. Life would be complicated, no doubt. But they could make it work, together.
Just a suggestion about the sort of thing I think would add to the atmosphere of the last scene and make it more satisfying. Of course, just my personal opininion!! :-)
I immensely enjoyed this story and would think it sad to have scenes dropped, but agree that the end sort of rattles me a little. I believe that is because this is the only time in the whole story where the acting persons think realistically about their long time future/career, while all the time before they just sort of take one step at a time and only think about the immediate consequences or implications of their decisions and feelings.
I think it might make the whole last dialogue a little more off hand by adding just another much less realistic suggestion, e.g.
Akitra: "I think I can do better. We could just a dragon and elope to some back-water planet. We pretend to have kidnapped Maica, buy us a herb and healing shop from the ransom money, change our names, and live happily ever after."
For a second, there was silence, and then Akitra laughed, a deep, rich, very-pleased-with-his-own-joke chuckle. Jak and Maika glanced at each other.
Jak said drily: "Or that."
Maica snorted: "Whatever. We will work out something"
Suddenly Jak couldn't hide his grin anymore. Whatever. Life would be complicated, no doubt. But they could make it work, together.
Just a suggestion about the sort of thing I think would add to the atmosphere of the last scene and make it more satisfying. Of course, just my personal opininion!! :-)
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November 15, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Ok, I just got through my second reading of this story. Be extremely flattered, because even as much as I loved Harry Potter and The Vampire Lestat, I only read those once through, so this is a huge compliment to your writing. There were a lot of things in the story on both reads that I wanted to know more about, but I have that in most stories and tend to fall in love with supporting characters with small parts, and was hoping that you would publish a second to fill in some of those details, only to find that you did and in the first three chapters of it that I was fuzzy on a lot of details and you started with some of my main points of curiosity. I'm looking forward to more goodness from your keyboard soon.
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November 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
i serlsy need to sleep.... like now...
but i wanted to note smthing...
Charias deleberately pairing himself up with Jak... then (after the pinned shark incident) with Izeri too. in clases..
its like he wanna be frends yea?
kay gsnite
ps: im reading ur moonlingt n BW at the same time. xD gets full coverage tt way? yay 8D
but i wanted to note smthing...
Charias deleberately pairing himself up with Jak... then (after the pinned shark incident) with Izeri too. in clases..
its like he wanna be frends yea?
kay gsnite
ps: im reading ur moonlingt n BW at the same time. xD gets full coverage tt way? yay 8D
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October 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
A beautiful story. I really liked it a lot. Up until the last chapter I doubted a happy end, but always hoped for it. I think it is ok as it is. You did a great job here. Thank you for sharing your work.
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August 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Awesome..... just awesome! :) x
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May 13, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I know this is a little late and I don't even know if you will get this but.....I think this is a great stand alone book. The unresolved issues aren't so big and prominent that it feels like something has gone unfinished by the time the book ends. I absolutely love this story and if you actually get it published could let me know? Because I would like to ass this book to my mini library. Have you written the sequel yet? I can't wait to check out your other stories.