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for Undesirable

by VelvetMace

person HannaFO
schedule October 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wah mean ending ;P
I couldn't stop laughing at the part where he mixes up the colors.
He reminded me of well me! lol. I am an idiot with colors :)
Thanks a bunch for the update!
person Scat
schedule October 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wow...this is soooo good! I'm checking out your live journal hehe. Seriously, hanging for chapter 5. I read all of this in one sitting, I rarely find anything so good that I can do that. Magic!
person J42
schedule October 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Just found this story - thanks for sharing it! I love this world you have created - the legalized service concept is very interesting. You have a wonderful sense of humor and I'm definitely looking forward to more updates to George's adventures. :-)
schedule October 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful, I hate cliff hangers but I'm willing to wait, keep it up and I look forward to the next part.
person Anon
schedule October 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is just so vastly different from anything I've ever read. Exceptional. And wow, those vampires sound like complete dicks. Reminds me why I hate vampires. (I really really hate vampires. . . .yet I never pass up the chance to read a vampire story) I love that I have absolutely no idea what to expect from you or what's going to happen next. Please keep it up.
person szaugg
schedule October 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Well this is so enjoyable. Witty and amusing, and the hints of big, bad, and sexual to come are intriguing. I'm very much looking forward to more. The main character is just completely adorable, acne or no. :-)
person angelmay
schedule October 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I like it so far,I'm looking to reading more.
person traxie
schedule October 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hihihi, why do I have the feeling that our little "undesirable" won't be out of that party in five minutes!

Can't wait for the next chapter! You made my day:)
schedule October 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
CHAPTER 3
Very nice build-up! Can't wait to see what happens next :)

This is well written and very promissing.
Good job!

schedule October 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm hooked. The narrator's voice is solid and I love the post-vampire takeover world. All the bureaucracy kills me. I can't wait to meet Lord Jeffrey.