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for Undesirable

by VelvetMace

person lakuniko
schedule September 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
finally you update! I'm so happy. Thanks a lot.
nice chapter.
It good to see they'd escape from that creepy vampire and awful town.
person Ben
schedule September 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Whoo Hoo an update! And on my birthday too! :D thank you sooo much I really love your story and am looking forward to a Jeffery/Wally/George scene. *wink*
person mw0627
schedule August 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
oooh murder, I saw that coming. Oh well no matter her troubles she is a bitch. Wally I hate him, he betrayed his friend's trust, he took him into a situation he wasn't sure would be save for him. By this point George would be better off calling his loving obsesive vampire who so far has been the best choice for him. I don't know all along I have had delusions that Lord Fancy Pants was going to show up and claim him but apparently my instincts have been wrong. Perhaps the pair should have made the obvious escape choice and jumped in the Missouri River.
person kristina
schedule August 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This is totally like, in the top 3 of my favorite net fiction stories EVER. I just looked in your profile to check out other things you've written, and I think its interesting that this is your only original story. I definitly encourage you to write more originals (though not before you finish with this one!) haha Although I'm not familiar with the Full Metal Alchemist 'verse, seeing that you wrote alot of fanfiction for it makes me want to finally look into that, since from this story it seems like we have similar tastes. Will also check out your recommendations. Do you have an account on ygallery?
person Neon Tokyo
schedule August 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oooo~! Can't wait to see what happens next! This story is awesome~! It's like better tha True Blood cause there's mansex ^^
person maloanne
schedule August 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Still reading this, still loving it, and I squeal each time I see an update (that is humiliating!! :) ). And oh the suspens! I hope they manage to escape Abram. Or better yet, That Jeffrey comes to the rescue, or maybe Chauncey, I am curious about him!
person womo
schedule August 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
AH!! I have to know what happens next!! *squirms on the floor*

the suspense is killing!!! awesome chapter. not a lot happened in terms of physical movement, but wow a lot CHANGED!!! i can't wait to see what happens next!!!! What will george and wally do? where's jeffery? and why is that maid/servant so creepy?? lol. great chapter. i enjoyed reading it!
person kiix
schedule August 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Why do I hear "Deliverance" banjos?
schedule August 19, 2009 at 12:00 AM
That was an evil cliffhanger... T_T Awesome writing though.

I can't wait to read the next chapter, I love this story!!! XD
person Perona
schedule August 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Uh oh, I hope Geo figures something out fast before him and Wally are trapped in the Boonies forever. Maybe Jeffrey will break them out? I'm insanely curious about Geo's old patron now, the mysterious Lord Fancy Trousers. Anyway Brilliant chapter!! (as always) Can't wait for more, this story is so engrossing!!