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by VelvetMace

person Perona
schedule January 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Wow! Finally the infamous Chauncy Towers. I'd been wondering about him! Amazing chapter, especially after that nerve-racking cliffie last time. Is Chuck still gonna give Geo away, since he found his blood so tasty? Do the other vampires know that Towers is 'Chuck' the resistance fighter? Ooooo can't wait for more, I love love love this story.
schedule January 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Two major, mindblowing revelations in two chapters! How do you even do that?!
I'm so torn between trusting and distrusting Chuck/Chauncey right now that words don't come close to describing it.
Their conversation also put things really into perspective- it's a very interesting POV on the relationship between vampires and humans. It's true enough that humans are destroying themselves, and the vampires here put a stop to that -whistle-
Don't worry about the sex- it was hot and not at all confusing :)

Looking forward to more!
schedule January 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Well, I did not see that coming! I'm really interested to know how this is going to end. ;)
person Avernion
schedule January 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I can’t believe this! I’ve been thinking ”what if Chuck is Fancy Trousers”, but then I would chuckle to myself. Yeah right that he was. Not a chance. I was letting my imagination run away with me again. Man. I must start trusting my instincts T^T
And Chucky handled this very well. Now, I don’t real agree with him at all points, but then why would I? But the way he talked to Gorge was very nice. He told him everything. It was also interesting to see that he was so fast to ask what Geo wanted in return. Now I just to know if Geo will get to remember it.
Great work. My heart always cries with JOY when I see an update is rearing its pretty face TuT
person mug
schedule January 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
So if Chuck(had mixed feelings on whether he was Chauncey or just some ordinary human resistance guy. The part where he revealed he was a vampire took me by surprise, even though it shouldnt have because of the strange stuff that george ended up seeing or dreaming and chuck's irritation) revealed himself to be Chauncey to geroge, does that mean he plans on keeping him....where the hell is jeff. i like the guy, but i hope he's in a ditch somewhere(thats for being mia and not gracing us with your wonderful-ness). and i dont think we need him anymore! :)
person mug
schedule January 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
*sigh* really, im so peeved at myself. there were so many friggin hints. and every time i came by them i was always like 'ooh thats weird' never thought much of it but at the same time i did but never made the connections....
person Avernion
schedule January 10, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Oh, and I’ve just come to realize… He’s the bastard who did all those things to Lady Dingaling! I’m angry at that, and I don’t even liked her! That does reflect poorly on his character, sure does. If Wally ever finds out, I don’t think he’ll like him anymore.
person lakuniko
schedule January 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Happy New year 2010!!
I wishing you a whole year of feeling good and being happy.

for this lastest chapters.
I really excited when I see your update. I'd skim it and the last line!! It surprised, but I kind of expect it because I'd read some comment from your reader that said Chuck is Chauncey and it click to me to when I consider another option.
schedule January 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
CHAPTER 28
Whoa, didn't expect that! I mean, it was somewhat foreshadowed that Chuck is not human, but I had no idea who he turned out to be. The ending of this chapter is just so perfect. Excellent bit of writing!

I liked the whole vamp/human history lesson too. Very nicely done, taking actual real history and interweaving it with fantasy plot. Makes it so much more believable.

Thank you for the awesome story :)
person bunnicle
schedule January 5, 2010 at 12:00 AM
update update update! !!!