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January 28, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 1. OOOOOO Kayden.... Who is Kayden? I wonder if he's one of those guys that in all of his youthful glory had a quickie and left the broken pieces to piece themselves back together.... I really like the way you opened up this story. Leaves more for the taking. :D
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January 28, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 2. Wow. I wouldn't even be able to explain what you did in my lifetime. It's like, you had the best way of explaining about the love and completeness thing in a relationship that it explained all the "oops" and "dangs." This is real awesome. I feel so.... childish. XD Still, it's a "wow" and it just keeps going.
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January 28, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 3. That was the most erotic kiss ever. So much so that I can taste it. The whole process was magical in an erotic way that I didn't care if I was one gender or the other.
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January 28, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 4. Hahahahaha. I love how those two's relationship is building. It does make me wonder though if the reason they stopped being friends was because they were too similar in certain aspects of their personality.
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January 28, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 5. Woo~ I love how... natural, if that's the right term, your story has flowed so far. It's as if you know where to put all the "woahs" and "wows" in your story without making it too overbearing. I anticipate the time when you'll get time to continue with this story as well.
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January 28, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 6. I can feel the little hairs on my body bristle with Ringo's conversation with his dad. Reminds me of my talks with my parents. And I really get where Ringo's going even though I understand that parents sometimes use the wrong tactics to bridge the gap they've got with their kids. (speaks from personal experiences) And in the process of wanting to prove them wrong, ya just end up doing the opposite to piss them off. -shurgs- Ah~ the daily tribulations of life.
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January 28, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 7. ROFL! I love how the chapter ended. You really know how to put a bit of humor into an erotic scene. Both here and in The Jigsaw. You've really done it and charmed me with both your stories.
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January 28, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 8. Very sensual. Your writing is very sensual and erotic when it comes to... ahem, foreplay and..... -blushes- Yeah.
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January 28, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 9. Present! Present! Present! Lots and lots of it! Wo~ If I was a publisher, I'd grab you and tuck you away before any other publisher does. Even as an Editor, really, some people are missing out on your stories.
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January 28, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 10. Woo~ Love the fight and poor Jimar getting a peek and not liking the after taste. For Kayden, note to self, don't push him if you're not gonna like the results. Reminds me a bit of Sam but with out all the obey orders and such. Gimme, gimme, gimme, gimme! I know there's more hiding in your hard drive some where. -attempts to high jack hard drive-