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September 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This wasn’t how I expected the latest edition to your book/story to start off. Not that that’s a bad thing, mind you! Quite the contrary... it was very enjoyable.
I don’t especially care for the Connors twins. I think after reading the side story where they were sort of featured in (Fool, I think it was titled), I at least felt somewhat sorry for them. Somewhat. I guess I’ll always envision them as elitist, spoiled little rich bitches who think they can get away with anything and everything they want because of who their Daddy is… was. Interesting that they both use sex as an outlet… and both were vying for Emilio’s affections/attention.
Now all grown up, Ann has grown into quite the bitter woman. And, God forbid, there was that twinge of regret for having pigeonholed her into the role as stated above as Ann reflected about her life, admitting her failures, wishing for things to have been different and to have more positive outcomes not only for herself but her twin, and the rest of her family. Perhaps she isn’t as selfish as previously thought after all.
That was quite the tense moment there when Ann nearly collided with the “tragically fucked-up son” (love that quote by the way!) of her one-time lover.
Ann’s attitude towards the staff at the home was rather harsh, if not spot-on for someone of her status and yet she had that moment where she was sort of kind, even complimentary to the young receptionist attempting to lose weight. Ann is more complex of a character than previously given credit. Her conversation with Lydia was sad in a way. It was obvious she’s been harboring a lot of guilt, anger, and a ton of emotional baggage for quite some time. She’s also got quite the foul mouth on her, yes? Daddy would be so proud.
I find it amusing how everyone who doesn’t know who Sin is finds him so attractive, polite, and an all-around nice guy. Since I’ve been reading the side stories and have reread Book One more times than I’d care to admit (eh-hem), it wasn’t surprising to me that Sin would seek Lydia out and visit her as maybe some sort of atonement for what he had done. As mentioned in this new chapter and in the previous story, Sin had had that awkward, unexpected “run-in” with Ann back at the Agency and had acted so very un-Sin-like, quiet, reserved, almost on his best behavior, and even apologetic. People better get used to the fact that Sin is changing, that Sin really does have a conscience and a heart.
It will be very interesting to see if Sin returns to the home to visit Lydia again now that he almost ran into Ann and has to at least suspect that he might have been identified – that perhaps the staff would mention his visits to the sister even if inadvertently. I’m sort of surprised that it seems Ann is going to just sit back and let things happen. I expected her to fly back to the Agency and confront Sin. One giant meltdown.
A very nice start! And I so look forward to more!
And, hey, a suggestion that you guys can obviously take or leave: you might want to consider moving your story to the Original Miscellaneous Slash section where In the Company of Shadows resides. I agree that really both stories would fall under “Drama”; however, the fact of the matter remains, the Misc section is more heavily trafficked. Go figure. In fact, that was where I looked for it on the 15th, creature of habit that I am. So think about it, this story deserves to be up front and loved! And naturally reviewed! Keep up the good work! I still haven't forgotten I owe you guys another monster of a review for the other half of ItCoS!
I don’t especially care for the Connors twins. I think after reading the side story where they were sort of featured in (Fool, I think it was titled), I at least felt somewhat sorry for them. Somewhat. I guess I’ll always envision them as elitist, spoiled little rich bitches who think they can get away with anything and everything they want because of who their Daddy is… was. Interesting that they both use sex as an outlet… and both were vying for Emilio’s affections/attention.
Now all grown up, Ann has grown into quite the bitter woman. And, God forbid, there was that twinge of regret for having pigeonholed her into the role as stated above as Ann reflected about her life, admitting her failures, wishing for things to have been different and to have more positive outcomes not only for herself but her twin, and the rest of her family. Perhaps she isn’t as selfish as previously thought after all.
That was quite the tense moment there when Ann nearly collided with the “tragically fucked-up son” (love that quote by the way!) of her one-time lover.
Ann’s attitude towards the staff at the home was rather harsh, if not spot-on for someone of her status and yet she had that moment where she was sort of kind, even complimentary to the young receptionist attempting to lose weight. Ann is more complex of a character than previously given credit. Her conversation with Lydia was sad in a way. It was obvious she’s been harboring a lot of guilt, anger, and a ton of emotional baggage for quite some time. She’s also got quite the foul mouth on her, yes? Daddy would be so proud.
I find it amusing how everyone who doesn’t know who Sin is finds him so attractive, polite, and an all-around nice guy. Since I’ve been reading the side stories and have reread Book One more times than I’d care to admit (eh-hem), it wasn’t surprising to me that Sin would seek Lydia out and visit her as maybe some sort of atonement for what he had done. As mentioned in this new chapter and in the previous story, Sin had had that awkward, unexpected “run-in” with Ann back at the Agency and had acted so very un-Sin-like, quiet, reserved, almost on his best behavior, and even apologetic. People better get used to the fact that Sin is changing, that Sin really does have a conscience and a heart.
It will be very interesting to see if Sin returns to the home to visit Lydia again now that he almost ran into Ann and has to at least suspect that he might have been identified – that perhaps the staff would mention his visits to the sister even if inadvertently. I’m sort of surprised that it seems Ann is going to just sit back and let things happen. I expected her to fly back to the Agency and confront Sin. One giant meltdown.
A very nice start! And I so look forward to more!
And, hey, a suggestion that you guys can obviously take or leave: you might want to consider moving your story to the Original Miscellaneous Slash section where In the Company of Shadows resides. I agree that really both stories would fall under “Drama”; however, the fact of the matter remains, the Misc section is more heavily trafficked. Go figure. In fact, that was where I looked for it on the 15th, creature of habit that I am. So think about it, this story deserves to be up front and loved! And naturally reviewed! Keep up the good work! I still haven't forgotten I owe you guys another monster of a review for the other half of ItCoS!