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i miss you up dating. so now i have to started from number 1, so i know what's going on again. than i will review. i read number 3 and peck at 4. so will have to start over just to make sure i don't miss anything. have to go to work now to i'll be up all night to finish this.

This is extremely funny! Keep up the good work. Oh btw I'm a guy. lol

All of your chapters have been wonderful, I hope that I haven't been offputting in my critics. I find well thought out criticism the biggest compliment ever, though I'm sure I'm wicked critical, I don't mean to be cruel. I found that our leading man, once again cracks me the hell up. Giant hairless balls nearly made me spit take. (note to self don't drink when reading your posts). I really like how your subtly kicking up the tension between chad and nick is working well. I feel that a lot of the action of these chapters is being caught up in these 'reviews' false and truthful. While highly amusing I think that the action scenes (I' refering to the 'real time' commentary we get about nicks classes and writing etc) is getting bogged down by large train of thought jumps between reviews and nicks writing. Maybe that is simpy because your posts so far have been on the shorter side, so its harder to get a really good sense of chapter progression. I take back my previous comment about maybe coming out of nick's head and would like to edit that to become maybe adding in more action commentary than review and writing commentary so we get a better sense of the relationship between nick's story and nick's life. For instance, outside of brainstorming in classes, what does nick do? Who does he hang out with? What is his family like? Who does he live with if anyone? How does he dress? Does he have other hobbies and obsessions beyond guys and writing? I feel like our view of him is a little stinted. I love the characterization that you have going on. Hoodie man sounds like sex on wheels, I like his little wink and sleep routine. Priceless. Chad is great too. I love that he's rocking the flustered Jock routine without becoming the overly dumb type (not that I think chad is winning any pulitzers). I find nick's sarcastic and cynical nature wonderfully refreshing mostly because there is a level of confidence and finesse in his cynicism that I often find lacking in other writings. I can't wait toread what you put up next. -The BL Queen (ps the nickname you gve me makes me soooo happy, I wish I had a throne of yaoi! For now I settle for bookshelves full of it.)

You don't jack off to our reviews? Well then. I guess I should hide the fact that I whack it to your story. Gratuitously.

*ahem* So. Yadda yadda, insert political statement about "yay omg boyz that r lyk reel ppl with lyk reel emotionzzzz and stuff ur great lolololol", end cue.

Uhhhhhhhh. I need sleep. I've seen your story for the past like... idk, however long you've had it on here, but I was like "eh. Not interested." And then, out of some miraculous feat of incurable boredom and Cocoa Pebbles, I started reading. And now I'm reviewing. It makes me wanna open a beer with my bellybutton. Or something. ... Never mind, that would hurt. A lot. My poor bellybutton...

Ah, so have a beer with me. And I shall move on to review the story-within-the-story:

LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL YOU'RE SO FUNNY. Your characters are original and awesome! Gotta admit though the last chapter sucked. But I love your story too much to care! I'm waiting for the two hotties to make sweet hot fornication-times on some sturdy, convenient surface.

Fuck, I'll probably forget that I read this. So when I get home from work tomorrow, I'll read it again, and be like "oh, this is familiar. Wait... -- wait. Woah. Dude. I... I... I'M HAVING A STRONG SENSE OF DEJA VU. SOMEONE CALL MADAM CLEO." and then I'll amble off, get a beer, and forget all over again.

Ridiculously long review: End.

It's still pretty interesting to read.

Good luck with your next chapter

I don't know what to say, really. I never saw this fic (or Shooting Stars Collide) as a political statement, just something to enjoy when I get home from work. Which is something you do very well. =3

On to a different topic! XD With my fangirl vision (which I can't seem to turn off,) I'm seeing a lot of smut potential in that little "study session" Nick just set up. I'm also seeing those paralells (I can never spell that word right xP) to Nick's life and Guy A's.

Meh, maybe I'm just seeing things. X3 I really oughta be in bed, right now. @w@

i'm sorry about my last review...i didn't mean to make you depressed by saying i would kill you...*sniff* sorry...

anyway! i wonder who's sending those text messages...??? and what will chad do - if it's not him sending them (hopefully not) - to the perpetrator?!?!?!?! i hope chad beats the crap out of them for even THINKING of taking what's his!!! (sorry...i AM one of the rabid yaoi fangirls - unfortunately for you) and why's chad so sleepy all the time?? is he STALKING nick?!?!?! *sigh* i can dream, right?

and on a lighter note! you unknowingly said my RL name in your PAN!!! *mock faints* I LOVE YOU, YOU KNOW!!! (you said i could announce my undying love to you publicly) can you guess what my name is???

ASOTA

btw...it wasn't really a death threat per say... more of a shooting threat... if i could aim, i could decide whether i just wanted to maim you or not... :D
ASOTA

My 2nd review for Young Sage. You kept the funniness yay!
Again I will say that this story is refreshing and interesting.
Although It is traveling a little slow plot wise. I spose I can foregive you cos its
a great read. By the way I am actually a yaoi fangirl. I swear we're not scary all the time...

*~ >w< geez, its like reading my own thoughts, when I try to write, and watch it come to life in a freaky way. Original:: yes; amazing first person POV:: yes; side-track-ie:: ... unfortunately yes. But I guess that gives this story its uniqueness without creating a ramble of nothingness & pointlessness ( so much-'ness'). I really do want to like this story & continue reading it, however, there is just something about it (that I can't figure out at the moment) that may lose my interest. Sorry >w< But continue writing, you & your stories are fantastic in the end! ~*