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January 19, 2009 at 12:00 AM
The title is the main theme song to rent; Seasons of Love.
It's definitely a good chapter; nice job throwing in the angst!
Chad's roommate is the rapist! XD.
Keep it up!
It's definitely a good chapter; nice job throwing in the angst!
Chad's roommate is the rapist! XD.
Keep it up!
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January 19, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Great story! And I lol'd at your reply to my comment. The title is Seasons of Love from the musical/movie Rent. And I want more! It's sooo great!
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January 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
O O O!!!
I HAVE REDISCOVERED THIS AMAZING PIECE OF FANFICTION. seriously though, I read it (and reviewed it, remember ^^) then I lost it then I FOUND IT AGAIN...and that would be the definition of rediscovered..but er...meh.
I'm not going to go into the 'politics' but even, I, as a girl (tra la la yay for women's lib) thought the whole 'gayness is flowers and rainbows' thing was getting muy annoying. But anyways, I did a very uncharacteristic SQUEEEEEEE at the end of this chap. And now I'm way to excited to go to bed. which is what I should be doing. but I'M TOO FANGIRLY NOW!!!
ok. *calms down*, you've been doing amazing with the character depth, well with Nick anyways. His sarcasm is gold. .. I actually thought the semi-rape scene was a little messy but I liked how it helped to develop Chad and Nick's relationship. :) This has to be my favorite chapter though--it catered to my inner girliness. hurrah!
I HAVE REDISCOVERED THIS AMAZING PIECE OF FANFICTION. seriously though, I read it (and reviewed it, remember ^^) then I lost it then I FOUND IT AGAIN...and that would be the definition of rediscovered..but er...meh.
I'm not going to go into the 'politics' but even, I, as a girl (tra la la yay for women's lib) thought the whole 'gayness is flowers and rainbows' thing was getting muy annoying. But anyways, I did a very uncharacteristic SQUEEEEEEE at the end of this chap. And now I'm way to excited to go to bed. which is what I should be doing. but I'M TOO FANGIRLY NOW!!!
ok. *calms down*, you've been doing amazing with the character depth, well with Nick anyways. His sarcasm is gold. .. I actually thought the semi-rape scene was a little messy but I liked how it helped to develop Chad and Nick's relationship. :) This has to be my favorite chapter though--it catered to my inner girliness. hurrah!
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January 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I didn't really feel the flow of progression with Nick and Chad (in this chapter... in the others, it was really good!), and describing your character's appearances isn't ALWAYS the most limiting thing for an author to do :)
But, that aside, I'm still really liking this story. You're really talented, and funny!
But, that aside, I'm still really liking this story. You're really talented, and funny!
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January 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
well, i'm glad that the awkwardness is over between those two. great job! i hate that nick's having nightmares though...
ASOTA
ASOTA
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January 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This story is irritating me.
You need to learn how to pace- the whole thing is just one convoluted mess of rushed writing.
You need to learn how to pace- the whole thing is just one convoluted mess of rushed writing.
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January 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Ooooh~ OwO Yay! My suspicions were right! XD At least, about Chad's crush. Whether or not he's telling the truth about Nick not being raped is still up for debate, in my non-caffinated mind at any rate. *brain synapses...sluggish*
Big questions, though. Where will things go from here? And just who the hell assaulted Nick?!? I know you can't answer either one (for the sake of remaining spoiler free,) but it doesn't change the fact they're stuck in my brain. X3
Great job, Sage! ^w^
Big questions, though. Where will things go from here? And just who the hell assaulted Nick?!? I know you can't answer either one (for the sake of remaining spoiler free,) but it doesn't change the fact they're stuck in my brain. X3
Great job, Sage! ^w^
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January 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
FINALLY! XD. I've been waiting for this since the second chapter ;-).
As for the story WITHIN the story, I like it as well; I think it would be hilarious if Chad ended up being a reviewer of the story!
As for the story WITHIN the story, I like it as well; I think it would be hilarious if Chad ended up being a reviewer of the story!
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January 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Where have you been all my life? Now tell me, how do I ---
Nah. Not going there. Okay, so first few chapters were great. (AKA - chapters one and two.) After a bit, the incorporation of reviews into the actual text of your story became a bit monotonous. And slightly annoying, since the story is supposed to be (at least, I assumed it was supposed to be) more about the development of your narrator, this Chad fellow and wacky-mole guy. (Unless I'm getting those last two confused and they're the same person; it's happened before.) The in-text paraphrasing of reviews and your - I'm presuming - personal response to them does make reading a bit awkward.
Usually I don't bother to comment on grammatical errors within a story of this length, simply because there's a tendency for an author to disregard any and all suggestions in that vein, but I've really only seen three errors throughout. I'll happily point them out later if you don't mind...but I do have a tendency to go into grammar Nazi mode when I'm looking for things.
Anyhow, in other plot-related gushiness,
OMG - update soooooon!
--The Frightfully Androgynous Marajohuiki
Nah. Not going there. Okay, so first few chapters were great. (AKA - chapters one and two.) After a bit, the incorporation of reviews into the actual text of your story became a bit monotonous. And slightly annoying, since the story is supposed to be (at least, I assumed it was supposed to be) more about the development of your narrator, this Chad fellow and wacky-mole guy. (Unless I'm getting those last two confused and they're the same person; it's happened before.) The in-text paraphrasing of reviews and your - I'm presuming - personal response to them does make reading a bit awkward.
Usually I don't bother to comment on grammatical errors within a story of this length, simply because there's a tendency for an author to disregard any and all suggestions in that vein, but I've really only seen three errors throughout. I'll happily point them out later if you don't mind...but I do have a tendency to go into grammar Nazi mode when I'm looking for things.
Anyhow, in other plot-related gushiness,
OMG - update soooooon!
--The Frightfully Androgynous Marajohuiki
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January 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Enjoying this story. I wonder how honest Chad was in telling Nick what happened to him. And I wonder how honest both guys are going to be with each other after this make-out session. Can't wait for the next chapter!