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SO I just read the rest of it... I enjoyed it a lot, both the story itself and the insights about writing. It made me laugh out loud, several times per chapter; mostly just the way you phrase things.

Some sort of statement on Mitchell's behalf would have been nice; was he psycho-stalker-type in love, or felt slighted in some way, or just plain sadistic? I know we don't always get these answers in real life, but a reader wants to know! Also, what the hell, Chad totally went through Nick's phone for no real reason, at least none that he knew about. -.-

So I would like to sign up as a groupie, I mean for email notifications, if and when you post something up again. Curious to see how your writing has changed.

Oh, and as a parting note- in light of this, from SO You Want To Write Slash:
"you should probably end it soon. Besides, it’s not like there are great works of literature out there that have attained immortal fame and praise AND have been over 12 chapters long."
-it made me laugh that this one ends after eleven.

Hey there, it's me, I just commented on your other "story"... this here is actually the story I found on FortunateM's rec list (I assume they've left you a quality review, as they tend to do).

Recently I was fortunate enough to get a nearly chapter-by-chapter review from someone who didn't find my story until its later stages, they were worried about spamming me but it made me grin like a loon all day, so I'm going to attempt to do the same.

I LOVE the premise- breaking the fourth wall, but not really, and making the whole thing so interactive. What a shame I only discovered it now, way after the fact! I would have asked you to keep Guy A a nerd, just to see how you work around that. ^_^
I just read chapter two, and I love how relatable it is in terms of writing a story and getting excited about responses as well as the problem of having your story buzz around your head to the point where you're willing to NOT talk to you crush, and writing porn in class hidden between your notes somewhere, and so on and so forth. I kept going "omg I KNOW" throughout, especially at this bit:

"Another review? I’m elated as usual, but I have to admit that the feeling is starting to go down."

OMG I KNOW. It's like an addiction, where you need more reviews and longer and faster for the same thrill. It's a disease. -.-

Anyway I'm off to read ch3. Talk to you in a bit. Curious to see if more than just Guys A and B hook up!

"if you do it enough times, the sock tends to turn yellow."

OH MY GOD THAT EXPLAINS SO MUCH OH GOD OH GOD

I love the fact that you encouraged your readers to review the story-with-the-story, and that people actually took you up on it. That's hilarious.

I quite enjoy your writing, it's humorous and eloquent and you're not above poking fun at yourself. Love it.

So what's with Chad? I'm definitely getting slashy vibes, too, but I may be biased. :P And what about the hot guy in class? Which one of these is the love interest, and which the distraction? Onwards!

Okay, so about chapter 5- actually I'm going to review your *author's note*, not sure I've ever done that before, but "you, the reader, can imagine them however you want. This optimizes their attractiveness." made me laugh and laugh. Do you go to school for Business or something? Nobody else usually talks like that. XD

So the plot around the winking guy thickens! I find it hard to believe that you'd put a rape scene in a story as lighthearted as this, so I'm curious to see what the hell is going on. On the other hand, if it IS, I'm curious to see how you'll pull it off. It's a win-win.

INTERESTING theory on mpreg. :P If there's enough sperm I guess they can fuse and start a sort of nuclear reaction or some shit. Critical mass achieved? Anyway I'm not sure if you don't like overly preachy reviews or if that's just your main character's opinion, but I got one coming. So deal.
What annoys me about mpreg isn't necessarily that it's so unrealistic (I mean, people write about aliens and angels and shape-shifters, so what the hell) it's that it takes two guys and tries to somehow squeeze them into a 1950's role models - M/F story narrative. It's not actually about men anymore, it's about a manly man and a woman (who happens to have a penis). I have a number of reasons why I, being female, would be interested in M/M stories (or gay porn), and No.1 on that list is the fact that I'm very, very tired of the standard M/F bullshit. If someone wants a damsel and a hero, why write slash in the first place? Every self-insert Mary Sue makes more sense to me than this.

Thank you, you can have your soap box back now. -.-

Uhhh so we don't know what happened. Wasn't expecting THAT. XP The guy is in so much pain, and I shouldn't be laughing, but I am. The eggs thing made me laugh- I know how it goes, too; any longer and you can ASK them if they're still fresh.
I'm sorry, I'm probably talking about things you don't even remember, two years later. I'm having such a good time, though.

...that's all for now; I need to get on with the story. I don't have time for this reviewing bullshit. Blame yourself.

I've skimmed through the odd story here and there of yours and this seemed to be the one that grabbed my attention and stuck, I think it's that wicked sense of humour of yours with a good bit of snark that I like :) It was definitely different than most of the other stories that I'm reading right now, it's like you took every thought and muttering you've ever had and put them onto paper. At first I think that threw me a little, I'm not used to reading a story that's set up like that but before I even got to the end of the first chapter it worked so well that I didn't even think about it anymore. As for Nick he was rather adorable in a smartass kind of way, I think you can't help but like him and Chad was that perfect jock love interest.^^ I wish I had found this when you were writing it, I would have tried to leave thoughtful and interesting reviews just to see if I could have gotten myself an assumed name and a mention. It was a fun story (for the most part) and I really enjoyed reading it ^_^

So... I just want to say, that this story was fairly awesome. I was grinning widely for about the last two chapters, and totally rooting for Chad all the way! Yay, that creepy mole man got sent to jail for being a psycho attempted rapist, as well! And I absolutely love references in stories where the characters say "It's not like I'm in a slash story" or "You guys are just like a class from a high school drama!" (from the GTO Jdorama). So overall, I really really liked this story, and I will have to bookmark for future readings!

-Miss Speller

Finally finished reading this, which is good because I have been totally avoiding my homework and I have a paper due tomorrow and, Dude, I need to get on it. I like the theme of a story within a story, mostly because its injected with bits of writing process stuff, and sometimes I fantasize that if I ever finish grad school that I will put a concerted effort into writing slash fics. The likelihood of me maitianing interest in one endevour for that long is unlikely, but, heh, who knows. Anyway, I love your characters. The pace of the story is great, not like a realationship is forced to quickly. I'm not usually into a wrap up chapter, but this one was better than some I've previously read. So, not sure what to do now that I'm caught up with all of your stories. The hunt continues.

This story is like ... So realistic man...
I love it!