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Hey! Just checking in. I know there are only 6 reviews but don't let that discourage you. Your writing is and story line are great. Hope to see an update soon.

Wow! Another 500+ hits! Yet only 5 reviews-4 discounting my comment about hits versus reviews.

I know reviews are important because it gives the writer a feel if they are going in the right direction or not. Positive feedback is always welcome but constructive critisim is also important and not meant to belittle or boo the writer. Constructive critisim helps a writer grow. It shows where their strengths a weaknesses lie. A new writer will always take the advice of well established writers so that they, too, can join the ranks of a most read author. For now Renay-Dragoneye, forget the review part and push on with your story.

I have one little suggestion. Go to your nearest library and find how-to-books on writing. Try to find literature on sci-fi or any genre your interested in and take notes. If you can, write to any well known author that writes in the genre your interested in and see if they can give you a few tips. I DO know when writing sci-fi you have to make that world and its inhabitants as real as possible. Read a few good sci-fi books to get a feel as to how that author gets his story across. R. R. Tolkein, Lord of the Rings, is an excellent example of fantasy/sci-fi at its best. Not only did he create a world that was believable but invented a spoken and written language, a.k.a., elvish. J. K. Rowling of Harry Potter fame is another good example.

I'm not saying that you have to write like them. It never hurts to learn from the best.

I think for your 2nd chapter you should do some POV for Dorian and Kahn in regards to each other. It would give an insight to how each man thinks. Also, give a few details about Kahn and his world. It would also be nice to know what century or year all of this takes place. Its good to have a timeline.

Your spelling and sentence structure is very good. I was able to breeze through the story without having to stop and backtrack due to a poorly contructed sentence or misspellings or random punctuation, yada, yada, yada.

I would really like to see what happens to Dorian and what trials and tribulations Kahn is going to put Dorian through.

As a reader I DO appriciate when a writer tells their readers how long it will be between chapters. That is school, family, illness, vacations, etc. Believe it or not I have written down my favorite stories and the date is chapter is posted. That way I can gage about when the next chapter will be out. There are a few that the last chapter was over 3 months ago! But some have explained why it will take time for each chapter to be out. I live for these stories. Saya a lot about my life. *sigh*

So, how about it Renay-Dragoneye. Will I be seeing a chapter 2 in the very near future? *waits with bated breath*

Perhaps you should try writing in your mother tongue. If it's English, I'm sorry.

Hey Renay-Dragoneye. See that you have over 500 hits yet only 3 reviews. Don't let it discourage you. The fact that you have over 500 hits is testiment that your story has merit. Some people just don't like to review or just aren't sure what they should say. I for one would like very much to see another chapter of Slave.

This sounds like its going to be an interesting story. Keep it up.

i like it so far and would like to see more, also intrigued as to how your going to incorporate the Mpreg. Well done and hope you update soon.

I like the story so far! I wonder what will happen to that poor boy now?? *sniff*

I hope his master isn't TOO cruel! >> LOL

I can't wait to read more! Thanks alot for the story! *hugs*