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September 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I liked this story! Unlike most slash wedding stories it was rather realistic, and I liked how you described their honeymoon *grins*
I noticed a few mistakes in the story but nothing horrific; generally, I liked it!
I noticed a few mistakes in the story but nothing horrific; generally, I liked it!
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August 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
uiwery98jioflkm THAT WAS SOOOO HOT. And sweet. Awww. x3
A tiny bit of grammar errors, but they were hardly noticeable. This was great. <3
A tiny bit of grammar errors, but they were hardly noticeable. This was great. <3
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August 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That was both adorable and freaking hot
I LOVE IT!
Great job!
I'd like to see more, about how they met and such.
I LOVE IT!
Great job!
I'd like to see more, about how they met and such.
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August 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Watch your tenses. Please. Please, please. It kinda ruins the story that you keep switching between past and present tense, that is usually seen as pretty bad writing. If you have problems with tenses (I don't even know if you are a native English speaker or not), you can get beta to help you!
I don't mean this to be rude, just as constructive criticism, ok? :)
The story itself is nice.
I don't mean this to be rude, just as constructive criticism, ok? :)
The story itself is nice.
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August 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I liked the story. It was both sweet and sexy.
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August 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very good story! Maybe you should think about writting the story from the beginning...tell how they met and the long journey they took before the wedding. You did such a great job I would love to read more about the characters. I would love to read more!! HINT! HINT! Did I happen to mention I would love to read more! LOL!