rate_review Reviews

I am going to stop reading this story until you at least learn how to write and spell.

I have to admit you have really made a mess of what started out to be a really good story. I think a third grader could do better writing it. It looks like you just threw it all together and didn't even bother to spell check or anything. The typos are so easy to catch and fix but you didn't even bother to try. How old are you anyway? Why don't you get a beta or put it up for adoption. I don't know what the original author was thinking letting you adopt her stories. It's really sad what you have done to this one. I hope you get your act together and take it more seriously so you can fix this story.

You had promised to update within a week after posting the last chapter, what happened? Is this story abandoned or discontinued yet again?

It feels like you are are rushing writing your chapters and the spelling is awful. Please try and be more careful and use spellcheck or something. I also wish the chapters were longer. The story does have promise but you should put more care into writing it.

I read your a/n and am so very sorry for everything your going through! I am glad you managed to ride out Sandy safely even though your apartment was flooded at least you are ok and that's what's important. ~~ huggles ~~ I don't know but think that Nick is in deep doggy poop and Vincent won't be too happy when he finds out. What happened to Logan? They were kind of careless and should have been more careful. I wouldn't want to be in their shoes when Vincent and Connor find out. Thanks so much for finding time to update! I hope things start getting better for you and take care of yourself. Oh, and I look forward to finding out what Raynor's plans are.

I just read this story for this first time but kind of got confused so will go back and read the original story to straighten out everything in my mind. I guess that's why it was noted in first chapter that this is a sequel to the first story, LOL. That will teach me to be more careful to read any author notes in the future. Anway, I love the characters and am a fan of vampires (True Blood, Vampire Diaries, Twilight Saga among them.) so that's what attracted me to read your story. I did notice there are a lot of minor spelling mistakes that you can probably fix just re-read the chapter and you should be able to find them. Good luck!

Raynor... that name sounds familiar. But it's been so long since I read the first story I don't remember if this was one of the enemies or not. Anyway can't wait to read what happens next :D !

You left this message in October; AN DNight: *is scared* plz don't kill me k ;-; i meant to have a chapter out as soon as a adopted this story but life got nuts i mean really hospital stay's and then lost my Internet for a bit hard drive crash (lost like 10 chapters of my other story to) so i had to redo the chapters i had for this story and i still think this is not long enough and still seems kinda bleh but i try'ed getting a beta kinda fell threw and then i checked my e-mail and I'm like omg ;-; has it been that long since i adopted it. so i'm supper sorry and idk i think i still will end up rewriting this chapter but maybe not just make the next one better. so on to my not so grate writing and i apologize in advance for my grammar and spelling. *bows* ~~~~~~ Seriously, why don't you just give up your stories for adoption since you don't seem to want to write any of them. I see you online all the time and you even review stories - just recently I saw one you left for a story I read and review. Oh, and stating you tried to get a beta and it fell through is kind of lame since I just checked the forum under 'searching for a beta' and there are two responses to your request. Please why don't you just give your stories to someone else who might be interested in them because you don't seem to be.

Oh, and here's a copy of the review you left for that story I mentioned. (omg Zage, its got to be Zage I was wondering when you were going to bring him in since to added the "..so far" when Daz was telling his story. omg I'm so excited plz update soon HUGS) It's funny, you don't seem to have a problem with your spelling in leaving a review so what's up with that?

Did you ever find a Beta over in the forum? I know there were two members who were willing to help you out. Please continue this story and don't abandon it.