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May 29, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This is a really funny type of teenage school. A gay guy thats a bit girlish loves to be seen as uncool and to not fit in any 'cliques'. And then he meets Ace all the feeling towards the 'math geek' become uncertain. I really hope you continue this story as I would love to find out what happens to Ace, Alex, Drake and the mysterious biker that seems to know Ian his father boyfriend.
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September 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Woot! Awesome update! :DD
I wonder what will happen next?? It's pretty hard to predict! LOL (that's great no?) ^^
Anyways, I can't wait to see how this is going!
Can't wait to read more! Thanks alot for the story! *hugs x3*
I wonder what will happen next?? It's pretty hard to predict! LOL (that's great no?) ^^
Anyways, I can't wait to see how this is going!
Can't wait to read more! Thanks alot for the story! *hugs x3*
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September 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Alex remains a real piece of work. A law unto himself.
Don't know what he has planned for the weekend visit to the city if the girls come with, but it will be no good, and I can forsee it screwing (bad choice of words here?)up time with Ace.
Perhaps because there is a weeks length between chapters, it is hard to remember small details that are referred to from time to time. If I were reading this in book form rather than serial form, it wouldn't be an issue. But the problem lies with me, not you.
More questions, is Drake a red herring or will he be an important player in future chapters? And Ok, you showed us "dad", but what about the boyfriend? If they are shifting around, wouldn't he be a live in one? and therefore around?
You've got great character detail going here. Look forward to see what you do with them, now that we know who they are.
until the next update
bahen
Don't know what he has planned for the weekend visit to the city if the girls come with, but it will be no good, and I can forsee it screwing (bad choice of words here?)up time with Ace.
Perhaps because there is a weeks length between chapters, it is hard to remember small details that are referred to from time to time. If I were reading this in book form rather than serial form, it wouldn't be an issue. But the problem lies with me, not you.
More questions, is Drake a red herring or will he be an important player in future chapters? And Ok, you showed us "dad", but what about the boyfriend? If they are shifting around, wouldn't he be a live in one? and therefore around?
You've got great character detail going here. Look forward to see what you do with them, now that we know who they are.
until the next update
bahen
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September 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
cool
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September 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Sal, you do realize this was 95% lemon (very nicely done mind you) and 5% plot? XD
What a scream - and what a little con artist Alex is.
So the next set ouf questions: How much does Ni know? And what is the Corbette connection? All very suss.
Seems to me that considering everything that was just put under his nose, Alex is a bit too self centered and not paying attention to what is going on infront of him. But then again, he is male. . . and things like that tend to get past them XD. . . at the best of times. Ni's reaction may have been 'normal' but a few more quesitons on his behalf wouldn't have gone astray. . .
looking forward to the next update.
bahen
What a scream - and what a little con artist Alex is.
So the next set ouf questions: How much does Ni know? And what is the Corbette connection? All very suss.
Seems to me that considering everything that was just put under his nose, Alex is a bit too self centered and not paying attention to what is going on infront of him. But then again, he is male. . . and things like that tend to get past them XD. . . at the best of times. Ni's reaction may have been 'normal' but a few more quesitons on his behalf wouldn't have gone astray. . .
looking forward to the next update.
bahen
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September 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Sleep sleep sleep! Ace is going to flip. When will Corbett take that helmet off? Only time, and you, will tell.
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September 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
15 hours of foreplay eh? don't know if it sounds like fun or tortureXD
You're keeping secrets Sal. As far as I can recall you never mentioned that the 'dad' had a boyfriend. And how would Corbette know that Alex would be in town that day, let alone know where to grab him. Is someone else in on this?
Hope you are going to give more information on Ian and why he is wanted. And why would he care if Alex is kidnapped, surely the dad and the sister would have a more vested interest in Alex's whereabouts, than the boyfriend..
And what sort of gang is this that Ian has left, so far they seem pretty harmless, except Alex has been kidnapped.
love your description of going up that staircase, what fun. . .lol
till the next chapter
bahen
You're keeping secrets Sal. As far as I can recall you never mentioned that the 'dad' had a boyfriend. And how would Corbette know that Alex would be in town that day, let alone know where to grab him. Is someone else in on this?
Hope you are going to give more information on Ian and why he is wanted. And why would he care if Alex is kidnapped, surely the dad and the sister would have a more vested interest in Alex's whereabouts, than the boyfriend..
And what sort of gang is this that Ian has left, so far they seem pretty harmless, except Alex has been kidnapped.
love your description of going up that staircase, what fun. . .lol
till the next chapter
bahen
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September 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Don't know what you've got in store for Alex, or why that guy has hauled him off to who knows where, or why he is wearing that helmet so you can't see his face. But my guess is, it has to be someone that Alex knows or at least would recognize, hence the hidden face. I hope the reveal will be in the next epsiode.
Nice style, but Alex is too cocky for his own good, it's amazing he wasn't murdered years ago, as I can imagine the trouble he has gotten into in the past. Street smarts is great, but he needs a bit of a learning curve if he plans to grow up and get beyond the ripe old age of 18.
bahen
Nice style, but Alex is too cocky for his own good, it's amazing he wasn't murdered years ago, as I can imagine the trouble he has gotten into in the past. Street smarts is great, but he needs a bit of a learning curve if he plans to grow up and get beyond the ripe old age of 18.
bahen
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September 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
D:
NO ONE HITS AN ALEX
Im gonna kick that guys ASS
DUN FUCK WIT TEH ALEX PHUCKERS
We will bury youuuuuu!!!
NO ONE HITS AN ALEX
Im gonna kick that guys ASS
DUN FUCK WIT TEH ALEX PHUCKERS
We will bury youuuuuu!!!
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September 3, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You've got a great story line going here Sal. Alex is cool without being obnoxious(yet).
The plot so far is straight forward except for who the mysterious biker is and why he 'helped' Alex in the first place. Hope this is gets answered soon and the plot progresses from there. Complicated is not always the way to go (remember K.I.S.S. or keep it simple stupid)
Nice to see that the man in the bar who picked him up, is still happy to wait the 2 days till he's of legal age. Now just hope they have enough sense to use a condom as well XD
Here's to Alex and the next update
bahen
The plot so far is straight forward except for who the mysterious biker is and why he 'helped' Alex in the first place. Hope this is gets answered soon and the plot progresses from there. Complicated is not always the way to go (remember K.I.S.S. or keep it simple stupid)
Nice to see that the man in the bar who picked him up, is still happy to wait the 2 days till he's of legal age. Now just hope they have enough sense to use a condom as well XD
Here's to Alex and the next update
bahen