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August 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OMG I love it!!! I'm so impressed with your concept of 'dragons' and I'm so very thankful for the information about them :) fabulous!! just fabulous!! please update soon!!
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August 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I absoloutely love this! It's really interesting and definitely original ;) One tip, though, would be to not put so much history into one place. It gets tedious to read - maybe seperate the history out, mention it in certain places but not all at once or something.
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August 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
oh i love it already, cant wait for an update. You have me intriuged lol
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August 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
A promising story and an intriguing idea. But I have to echo Cherry Starburst concerning the info dump. There is a lot of information in a very short space. It is information that you, the author, need to know but that can probably be revealed to the reader over time. I have to admit that my eyes kept skimming forward and I had to force them back.
The begining of the chapter I particularly commend you for. I do like stories to start with a bang. It makes it easy to keep reading.
The begining of the chapter I particularly commend you for. I do like stories to start with a bang. It makes it easy to keep reading.
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August 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
this looks interesting ^__^ it'll be fun to watch lex rebel since i doubt he'll go quietly.
Hope to see more from you soon ^^
Hope to see more from you soon ^^
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August 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It's really interesting, I like the whole plot you got going on here. Lexi and Angel have me wondering what will happen to them. Poor things, what are the chances they will get to stay together? I wonder how some dominate is going to like Lexi when he is obviously not what they are use to when it comes to submissives? I hope you stick with it, I'd love to see what you got in mind for these characters.
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August 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I LOVE IT O.O
The world you created...brilliant!
Please update soon!
The world you created...brilliant!
Please update soon!
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August 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Yes, yes! Please continue the story. I'm an avid reader and would like to think of myself as a connoisseur of stories. My rule of thumb is, if the first chapter has you on edge and salivating like Palov's dog, it can only get better. Can't wait for chapter 2!
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August 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Great start! Waiting for the dominant part....
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August 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Interesting idea...I'm curious about what happens to the brothers now that they've been captured...hope to find out soon!