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for Independence

by arimi

person cfweber1b
schedule August 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Weeee... Let the party begin. and what will Lucien do when Lex runs? or trys to but then there's Angel.. Hmmm Matthew? The fight between Reese and Lucien ought to be interesting but Lex's initial reaction was sooo funny.
grin. and hopes for more.
person mcdgoddess
schedule August 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I liked this chapter. Lucien just goes right in doesn't he. I can't wait to see when he discovers that Lex is a hell of a lot different from the other submissives.
schedule August 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Don't worry you did great! Never second guess yourself. If you have a friend who likes yaoi, let them read it and give you an unbiased opinion. They can also spot any errors in spelling, etc. It is tough without a beta.

Now onto the review. Poor Lex. Maybe, just maybe he shouldn't have had a stare down with Lucien. But how was Lex to know that Lucien doesn't want a "submissive" submissive. That Lucien wants a "submissive" with a little fire in his belly. And how about that Raven accepting Lucien's challenge! If all the dominanats know of Lucien's battle prowes, isn't Raven just asking for his ass to be kicked to hell and back? Or is there a history of rivalery between said two? Guess that willl come to light later in the story.

What about Lex's brother Angel? Would be nice if Lucien's friend Mathew claims him. Maybe that way Lex and Angel could see each other. Will just have to wait and see, hm!

Keep up the good work. I look forward to the next chapter.
person Aki Arau
schedule August 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
lovely chapter! You needn't have worried, it kept me on my toes, i couldn't sit still! I just hope you update daily and finish... It just frustrates and depresses me so when a story like this is dropped! =D will eagerly await the next chapter.
schedule August 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh wow, I can't wait until they talk to each other, I think it would be prety amusing! Hahah, thanks so much for this chapter, it definitely kept my attention. Keep up the great work! 8D
person lakuniko
schedule August 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
well writen. I love this^^
thank for great fic.
person kiens
schedule August 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wow wow and wow, you're totally leaving me hanging for more XD loved this chapter!
person k
schedule August 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Um.. Omg CLIFF HANGER!!ARRGGGGI CANNOT wait for the next chapter!Please Update I love this story so much.
person darkmelody
schedule August 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Im looking soo sooo SOOOO!! much to your next update.
omg. Here comes the juicy slash parts.
Keep on rocking your story
Thanks
person Anon
schedule August 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
UPDATE SOON PLEASE!! i hope nothing bad happens to lex or angel...
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