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hmmm intriguing...i love mysteries so i can't wait to see what the come up with from adam's past.

Now we get to see what type of trouble the boys are really in. Poor Adam having to dig all this up. Hope he doesn't end up broken again.

I love how Joseph turns pushy!! For someone who is significantly smaller (size wise) to three other giants his fire certainly makes up for it! Earnest becomes my name when waiting to see him do something. Truly can't wait to see what happens to those four.

You made my Sunday evening so much better just posting this ney chapter :)

You made my Sunday evening so much better just posting this new chapter :)

Can't wait for the next update

whats going on how come u havn't updAated in a little bit, for this one or the knew one (blood lust)

Hey. The previous 2 chapters seemed a little rushed. I understand that for the first one it accentuated the mood. However, It was a little bit of a let down. It wasn't your typical writing. I enjoy your methodical banter and action. The chapter had none of it. The second chapter was a bit more your style. However, it still lacked something. I don't know what at this point. Your last chapter (33 I think, I forgot to look), was back to your style. I don't know what "advice" to give you, as part of "constructive criticism." I'm not very good at writing narratives, I'm to chaotic. My ideas are all over the place.

Now the great news: I loved the chapters' ideas. The last chapter showing Adam as an equally capable male was excellent. With Roth as an almost ueber male, Adam doesn't get to show his stuff to often. It was nice to see him do so. I also liked more Nathan action. We don't see or hear from him very often. It is his quiet strength and presence that make his character. He doesn't HAVE to speak for me to feel his presence in the chapter.

Overall A++

Joseph and Nathan are just precious.
It's lovely that Roth and Adam are loving each other and working together at whatever comes their way. :)
can't wait to see what comes next!

I guess Roth should have done the talking because as of right now they still no nothing about what these people want or who they really are. I would have thought they would have done more listening then talking but I guess when emotions start to play you can't control yourselves to much. The thought occurred to me, what if they just wanted to get all of them out of the house to do something to the house or possibly someone back at the house, to use as sort of a "you don't know who you are messing with so watch your back" message. Anywho...maybe next time they could listen and learn more about this "other party" before threatening to call the cops. All in all good scene, and looking forward to the next one. The end did feel a little rushed, maybe flushing out the love scene would have made it more fulfilling at the conclusion of the scene.