rate_review Reviews

Ah, updated so soon~!
Indeed, poor Ray, poor George. Actually, I can identfy with this chapter too! Yesterday, the cockroach, which was in the room upstairs, decided to attack me from above and jumped from the stairs on the unsuspacting me. Luckly for me, he missed, and my neighbour dealt with it (my hero :D). Let's hope it was the same cockroach XD
So, for this chapter- I didn't understand what made the Dragon's hand fall. I guess it was the snake man, but it wasn't specified much- how did he do it? Bare hands? Invisible Sword?
Anyway he sounds like a fun character, heroic and stuff. Maybe will give Ray a mouth to mouth :D
And I was very surprised, since I only expected one character, and actually, a dinosaur. But hurray for flyingsnakeman! :> Thank you for updating so quickly, I'll wait for the next update~! (and you're most welcome~)

Great update :D
I am deffenetly gonna stick around now!
I love dragons and such mythical beast XD
Please do continue!!!

: O ilovethis!
George is hot Ilove him.
&&& The Snake man is ripped? apparently so, but how? Squats? Butt clenches?
Mental images ARE amusing.

This has definately got my attention. I love how the character of Ray is fleshed out so nicely in just the first chapter! His history, his current situation and his personality are all there, with nothing left out! Very well done and brava for doing so because that is very difficult to do. I must say, as well, the length of the chapter (long) was delicious! I love long chapters...makes the update worth reading! Just becareful of one teensy weeny thing: don't fall into the pit of "humour during a scary scene". You haven't in this first chapter, though there was a smudge after flavour of it in the last paragraph with the mention of the fortune cookie. True,people react differently in differnt situations...just ensure that you keep the charater believable. Ugh...look at me, babbling on! This story is well done so far, and I am curious as to what the plot is exactly! Update soon, and all the jazz!

"Seriously, I'm joking!" (SeriouslyJoking)

Well I though this was going to be another one of those dating your boss things xD but i read it anyways just to see now im like hanging off the edge of my chair wondering whats gonna go on ^^ update soon :D

Well I though this was going to be another one of those dating your boss things xD but i read it anyways just to see now im like hanging off the edge of my chair wondering whats gonna go on ^^ update soon :D

This is a very interesting story you have here. I'm loving it so far keep up the good work.

Oh man if I saw a hole that big I'd be afraid I'd fall in.

ohh my god that was freaking awesome! i was not expecting that. you're really good at writing action, i got into this and was so afraid for ray haha. this nameless savior of his sounds hot... but he needs to help poor ray breathe! i definitely laughed at the image of him fearlessly killing the dragon while ray lays on the ground like a limp noodle suffocated by a chopped off arm hahaha oh boy. this story rocks!! and so do you by updating so fast!

I love your story! I'm dying to know what happens next with our pretty snake-warrior

Wow. I wasn't sure if I would like this, but it's interesting so far. Can't wait to find out what happens next!