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September 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I apologize to people who made reviews (kittycat i think your name went) and had them deleted) i appreciate the support but I accidently deleted it when I was trying to press something else. so yeah....so sorry
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August 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm definitely liking this story and can't wait to see wher you go with it! I await your next update with great anticipation!
~kitty
~kitty
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August 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I saw a few errors within the story but I am really interested to see where this story goes.
please keep writing.
please keep writing.
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July 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapters 1-6.
Well, I have to say I'm kinda of torn. At first the stalker is some nut who seems to connect with her when she starts her radio talk show. You get the info that he killed her daughter, which I not happy about (involving kids and all). Even worse he killed her baby - A BABY - after killing her husband or boyfriend, the baby's father. Now I don't know how you plan the ending, but after killing her baby, he's not just some sicko thinking he's in love with her. He a MONSTER, who actually had her feed her own baby rat poison. This, of course, has only one ending to it - HE MUST DIE! I don't care his reason or thinking - he killed her baby, he had not mercy for a BABY - HE MUST DIE!!!
Then we get that he was stalking her since she was a teenager - that he killed her father and brother. Ok, don't really care about them, since daddy was a sicko too and brother did nothing to help her. My question is how could she even think about dating, let alone falling in love with a man and having a baby. There's a part where he tells her he told her not to have or keep the baby. Why did she keep her baby - she knew how he kills, that he had absolutely no problem with killing anyone around her. He killed her father, her brother, her baby's father and she didn't think he was crazy enough to kill her baby. I'm not saying it's her fault, but I am thinking that it not believable. Any woman would give up her child, make sure the her baby is safe even if that means never seeing the baby. Letting someone else raise the baby just as long as the baby is alive.
The last part is EVERYONE KNOWS WHO THIS CRAZY STALKER IS. That Richard guy from her childhood, after 10 years he hasn't been found or caught. Huuummmm...I don't know about that?
Like I said, I'm torn. I like your writing - it's really good. I like the whole suspense part and even the thriller part too. I can take death, but the baby killing - killed the whole story for me. Also, you didn't list "death" as one of the warnings of this story. I don't like death stories and especially minor or, in this case, infant death.
Ending is a given - HE MUST DIE!!!
Well, I have to say I'm kinda of torn. At first the stalker is some nut who seems to connect with her when she starts her radio talk show. You get the info that he killed her daughter, which I not happy about (involving kids and all). Even worse he killed her baby - A BABY - after killing her husband or boyfriend, the baby's father. Now I don't know how you plan the ending, but after killing her baby, he's not just some sicko thinking he's in love with her. He a MONSTER, who actually had her feed her own baby rat poison. This, of course, has only one ending to it - HE MUST DIE! I don't care his reason or thinking - he killed her baby, he had not mercy for a BABY - HE MUST DIE!!!
Then we get that he was stalking her since she was a teenager - that he killed her father and brother. Ok, don't really care about them, since daddy was a sicko too and brother did nothing to help her. My question is how could she even think about dating, let alone falling in love with a man and having a baby. There's a part where he tells her he told her not to have or keep the baby. Why did she keep her baby - she knew how he kills, that he had absolutely no problem with killing anyone around her. He killed her father, her brother, her baby's father and she didn't think he was crazy enough to kill her baby. I'm not saying it's her fault, but I am thinking that it not believable. Any woman would give up her child, make sure the her baby is safe even if that means never seeing the baby. Letting someone else raise the baby just as long as the baby is alive.
The last part is EVERYONE KNOWS WHO THIS CRAZY STALKER IS. That Richard guy from her childhood, after 10 years he hasn't been found or caught. Huuummmm...I don't know about that?
Like I said, I'm torn. I like your writing - it's really good. I like the whole suspense part and even the thriller part too. I can take death, but the baby killing - killed the whole story for me. Also, you didn't list "death" as one of the warnings of this story. I don't like death stories and especially minor or, in this case, infant death.
Ending is a given - HE MUST DIE!!!
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July 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
first off solitude i'm super sorry. i didn't mean to get you upset and i honestly thought i put death down as a warning. now i don't know how to go back in and fix it. :(
Also there are reasons why she kept the baby which will be revealed later on.
and there a re a lot of serial killer cases where the cops actually know who the killer is but don't manage to catch him for years. there are tricks to it but it certainly can be done
finally, the baby killing freaked me out too, it was my least favorite part of the story but i wrote this a long time ago after i had seen a similar case on the news. I don't mean to offend, but i try to make it as true to character as possible and with my characters temper that would have been the natural action for him to take.
i'm not sure if you'll even come back and see this but i did want to put it here in case you did. Thanks for the review
Also there are reasons why she kept the baby which will be revealed later on.
and there a re a lot of serial killer cases where the cops actually know who the killer is but don't manage to catch him for years. there are tricks to it but it certainly can be done
finally, the baby killing freaked me out too, it was my least favorite part of the story but i wrote this a long time ago after i had seen a similar case on the news. I don't mean to offend, but i try to make it as true to character as possible and with my characters temper that would have been the natural action for him to take.
i'm not sure if you'll even come back and see this but i did want to put it here in case you did. Thanks for the review
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July 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Whoa...This is one awesomely twisted story! I am loving it!! The plot is so original. I think maybe that the characters need a bit more depth/character development. All the questions of why "Joker" is stalking her/who is he, what is his motivation etc are still unanswered but its only the third chapter so lol, I'll be definitely reading this to find out more! Awesome start!