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Love it I usually don't read stories with rape but this story is an exception keep up the good work and please update soon

Don't you think it's weird that, as I was reading your story, you were reading mine? I'm torn between changing the locks and embracing you. I'm cheap so let's go for the latter. You wanna come to me or me to you?
I find the use of 'bum' appealing .. And it makes me giggle.
The phrase 'begged off' is new to me and at first I didn't quite get it. I guess this means I'm not down with the cool guys anymore...
Gooey goodness and twinky goodness? Oh my goodness.
Who eats chocolate pancakes? Nothing beats syrup with a little pancake.

I was really hooked into your story when I first stumbled upon it. I like the build-up about the Monster and a part of me is hankering for more scenes, so I'm glad that now for the fact that the language barrier is slowly coming down. Looking forward to a new development.

What?! My name is not- ...Wait... it really is. Well, okay... uhm, hadn't seen that... It was supposed to come from a song, Pavane; the first line of the song, actually. But it's quite funny none the less xD
You're funny ^^ And you have a good story going!
I'll look forward to tuesday => though to me it'll probably first be on wednesday: Live in Scandinavia :) (That is, assuming you're writing from the states ^.^)
See ya'round! <.<

It's strange . . . I have *really* mixed feelings about this piece, but I'm totally *addicted*.

I love the concept; it's very unique and original, and I love the idea of humanising the monster and building a relationship between him and the human. It adds a new dimension to the whole concept of 'romance', it explores interesting themes and deals with complex issues. I like that you work issues of consent and abuse and reinvent them in new ways to explore the philosophy of such issues . . . the monster almost becomes symbolic, or a manifestation of the 'monster' in the human's mind after years of neglect. It's very clever!

I would prefer longer chapters, simply as it's so easy to get drawn in and the spell gets broken far too quickly. Perhaps a little more detail on imagery would be nice . . . like it took five chapters to really describe the demon, and when you did I got a very *vivid* image of him, which was great, but I would love details like that elsewhere (what the human looks like, how people feel, that kind of stuff). I feel like you have a *lot* of interesting things to say, especially the development of the human's emotions and perceptions, but sometimes it feels a little blasé . . . like 'serious, serious, "yeah, it's crap, yawl, but whatevs", serious', so it breaks the tension and drama and takes the tone down a notch.

It's an AMAZING story. I love it. It's probably the only reason I'm checking the Original section each day :) Please keep up this kind of work and effort, I really admire it! Thank you for the regular updates, too :)

That monster, well he's growing on me. I just wonder what had changed to make him different towards Brett. I'm sure the story will fill us in as time goes on. It made me very happy to see a new update. By the way I like the progression this story is taking, its doesn't beat around the bush and sets you right up in the middle of the problem. I think Logan is sneaky and this love triangle just might end up a bloody mess.

You get zero points for putting your author's note within the text of the story. Just no.

Ooh, a really good story ^^
I will be looking out for an update xD

Made the monster's developing feeling towards the him....
Poast more asap please.