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Yaaaaay! Another chappie!

Awww poor Kyllie. God, she must be terrified. I'd be surprised if she doesn't go into psycho somatic shutdown or PS amnesia or just plain shock. God...the poor thing.

*hugs her tight*

Ryan is so mean here. God..he's such a sadistic bastard! I hope he never has to remove a knife, even if only to threaten her. Oh I know he'd never actually stab or slash her, but Kyllie doesn't know that. He could hold a knife to her skin with no intention of harming her with it, but she wouldn't know that. Hell, if that happened to me, I think I'd piss myself.

Please update whenever you get a chance, and good luck with the move! Stay safe if you're flying, and even if you're not, still stay safe! I'll miss you.

*hugs you close*

And thank you for the acknowledgement in the A/N, Sahgira. I am not awesome, but I try. *smiles* You're my little one. It's my job to help you. And I love inserting my 2 cents too. *laughs*

Keep up the amazing work!!!!

Love Nila

I'm giving you 6 5+ ratings. One for each chapter, simply because it is amazing.

*Pulls pin out of hand grenade and stuffs it down Ryan's pants* There ya go, ya fucker! blow up, you baby raping bastard!!!!!!!!!

Poor Kyllie. Oh my god poor Kyllie. And nobody gives a fucking shit how she feels! It's sickening! I can't stand it!

Greg seems nice enough, but the others? I hope they die!

And now I'm scared of what they're going to do to her...I don't like to imagine.

Please update again soon; this is getting really intense.

I can't express the sorrow that Kylie feels: she was torn from her home, family and friends and taken into Hell. I know that this story is far from over but I do hope that she will be somehow be reunited with those she loves...

Linda

this is a great (but very sad) beginning for Kylie and how she became a prostitute. as much as I like her, I feel so sorry for her. Even if she escapes (which is very unlikely because of the tight guard Ryan has on her) I don't think that she could ever live a normal life again. This is a terrific story and I look forward to updates!

Linda

Poor poor Kyllie. She is like a little girl; so utterly and completely terrified. I keep having to remind myself that compared to me she is still just a baby. Gosh, to be fifteen again. And she's the baby too. Poor little thing.

Her innocence really just made me want to snatch her up and cuddle her, keeping her from harm. And when she was calling for her brother in the arms of Ryan...I cried. I really did cry.

And then he was a bastard and locked her up when she was just trying to think and sort through the two choices he was giving her...He didn't even give her time! And then he chained and gagged her...poor thing.

I can see some Gor in there too. *smiles knowingly* Very subtle things you might not even realize you're putting in. Both stories I can see it.

And the fact that Ryan is affected by tears and hers seemingly more than others is sweet. He's fighting his feelings for her from the very beginning it seems.

Ani, love, this story is amazing. You're doing an incredible job.

With love and much snuggling and shushing and comforting for little Kyllie-bird,
Nila

i like this story as it gives us a good insight to the background of 'to become'..keep up the good work

Chapter 1

I love this chapter. I think Kyllie is adorable, and it really shows the life she's losing right from the start. I enjoy her description, especially about how happy she was. Her family life seems happy too, and I think I am going to cry. I wanted to you know. I was tearing up just knowing she is going to lose it all.

On to chappie 2!

*literally starts to cry*

Why? It's not fair! Poor Kyllie!

When he tells her not to cry...
*cries harder*

Amazing. Great job.