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for To Become

by kylienna

person Bella
schedule July 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
you=fantastic.
i know i already told you they were amazing but i just though i should give you a little review.
<3
i hope you update every night! i'll definitely keep reading. :]]
person Eastwind256
schedule July 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I just stumbled across this story and I have to say so far I'm glad I did. I't really well done, the characters feel very real. I'm definately going to be following this as long as you keep it going.
schedule July 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I was hooked by this story the moment I came across it this morning. In fact, I read the entire thing in one sitting. It was hard to get through but I won't stop reading it. It is addicting and sad at the same time. I look forward to reading more

Linda
person Anon
schedule July 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
keep it upp.. its good
:)
person Luinil_Telcontar
schedule July 13, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow. Awww, poor Kyllie. And yeah, Ryan ain't gonna like this new development of hers.

But why's he such a fucking bastard to the poor girl? Christ!

And how was she caught anyway? How did she get here? And where'd she get the journal anyway?

Keep writing; this is incredible.
person Luinil_Telcontar
schedule July 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow. That was short yet pretty emotional. And those words. Ouch.

But he doesn't mean them! He CAN'T mean them.

Yet they always do.

They make you feel beautiful, desireable, and then they shatter you with one simple word.

I love this story.

Please update again soon.

I can't wait to see where it is going to go.
person Luinil_Telcontar
schedule July 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh wow. You've really captured the emotion of being captured in that way. The love, the hate, the need, the disgust, the want, the loneliness...

Take it from someone who knows...

Someone who's been there.

Nila
person LOVELUST
schedule July 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Great story. Really interesting concept. Maybe you could go into more detail with somethings. I really liked it and I hope you update soon.