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Yay, this made me happy. Poor Merrick, getting all beat up like that. I'm eagerly awaiting Theo's reaction.

wow,hun, you really wrote a gorgeus chapter 14.
i like the way you've handled things.
i read the first two cha. of thi sstory long time ago and now i reread the whole thing and
i have to tell you i like it a lot.
violence is bad, also necessary sometimes too.

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I can't remember whether I've reviewed before, but I love all your stories. :) thank you for the update.

I keep on bouncing around .::wahhh!!::. I love theo! the first chapter makes me read the summary again (because it sounded like the fic suppose to be in Merrick POV, but then started with Theo) but, I just love it how you alternating the situation/POV and good continuation ^-^.man, I just love how clean cut Theo is (thehehe..a list of non-offensive expletives), but didn't make me feel like him a total BS.. I can really feel how sincere Theo is and his mild obsessive/compulsive disorder reaaally makes him interesting (love you Theo)
Furthermore, I love how this fic isn't about a bad boy trying to give 'real world' outlook to sheltered good kid or good kid trying to show/save bad boy that live is good. people just are and we can get to know each other w/o making everything uniformity . (love Merrick name by the way) oh, just know how frustrated Merrick is with the neighborhood and high-school, a small,all knowing neighborhoods with high school kids cataloguing to labels. huh really make me goes crazy...

bottom line is,just love how you defy my first perception regarding the fic and love where you bring your readers(excellent driving so far and didn't feel left out xp)

p/s: please send my love to Theo and ganbatte! in proving you're the best man for merrick (oh, your obsessive worrying is really cute, theo!)

note:sorry for the bad english.hope you have no problem understand it.
urm before that, listing what else that I like about this fic (other than the above stated):
1) love how you portray and added this 2 characters Charles and Brent providing conflicts and different outlook ..eg: both character crazy on dominance and you showed how it used in different situation..
but I didn't get Theo's mum character pat down. Do you meant to for the readers to just have vague feeling about her? or I'm the one missed out?
2) Max and nursery - d***, the moment Merrick found her also the moment I get a breather..(the town is stifling).Very good props for Merrick.
3)Theo interaction with other student - really help me get the grasp of the kids in the school and how friendly and well liked he is even with different cliques. Especially the earlier part where Theo save Merrick from the jocks (ahh, love that scene).
4) all the bonding scenes between Theo/Merrick - really feel natural, the spat, the friendly, the stand off.. well everything really. the flow is very good.None of the feeling like you just created 'this' scene just to force them interacting.
and many2 more that i neglected to mention..

haha, sorry for the long review,ah just 0///0.::flushing face, hands on the nape::. I'm not a good reviewer, won't be writing for each chapter. so I really want you to know I really aprreciate you sharing this with us, readers plus so you know I keep reading it even no more review =)

i thought that theo sounded more ooc than merrick...but that's my opinion. UPDATE SOON PLEASE!!
ASOTA

Ooooohh!!!!!!!! Dom Theo and sub Merrick!!!! HA!

Now there's a twist!!!!

Thanks for the story!
R

wow
Merrick seems totally in character, it sounds a lot like when he was thinking about Brent at the very begining and worrying that he shouldn't call him. so yeah, it totally makes sense.

ok so I officially love Theo right now.
Like so much.
Because that is the best reaction to have. he didn't get all mad and took it out on Merrick, he just sort of went, 'he's not happy. but I'm going to make sure that he will be.'
that's just so awesome.

and I hate Brent.
it really bothers me how much Merrick seems to have vested in this relationship and how little Brent does.
which I guess is a good thing, because it means that your writing so realisticly portrays that kind of relationship. But still. It makes me very sad. And angry at Brent.
*goes off to fantasize about Theo using his mad jujitsu skills to beat Brent up and then carrying Merrick off bridal/princess style*

This is a great story. Don't worry. Merrick sounds very authentic: There basically seems to be an intreaguing story line behind the Brent-merrick relationship. It makes it more interesting.
Can't wait to hear what comes next!

Dude, I can't stand Brent. I can't wait to be rid of him. I'm also looking forward to more interaction with Theo.