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March 31, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Why does he keep blaming her for everything? It's not her fault he can't keep it in his pants. I mean, HE'S the one who stripped her bare! I hate that she's being raped by him almost every night, I was really hoping she escaped. I think you hinted at him impregnating her? Personally, I think she should kill him and his spawn
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January 1, 2011 at 12:00 AM
THANK YOU! Fianlly someone who writes a story about rape and sticks to it! I hate it when the female gets raped and falls inatantly for the guy who raped her. I'm very happy you stayed true. But I have a feeling that their feelings will change. But I like how you described the Warlords species, with the sharpened teeth, it made me quiver! Please update soon
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October 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I know the chances are slim that you'll update but I'll give it a go anyway. PLEASE continue with this. It caught my eye as I was milling about, looking for something to read and I just had to read all the chapters in one sitting. Needless to say my errands did not get done.
I'm hoping that you'll keep this going so that we, the readers, can learn all about the two cultures and how everything really started.
I'm hoping that you'll keep this going so that we, the readers, can learn all about the two cultures and how everything really started.
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October 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Please update this story!
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September 11, 2008 at 12:00 AM
*mouth hanging open in shock* this story is by far one of the best stories I have ever read...PLEASE UPDATE, PLEASE I AM BEGGING YOU. As soon as you get the chance please update this amazing story. Ja Mata Misawo
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August 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is made of win and awesome. Keep up the good work.
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August 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You know, I've been thinking a lot about this story. It's just so good, but it's been even more in my thoughts since reading your author's note in the review section, explaining some of the back story. It's just bloody magic! And in all honesty, I'm curious as hell about it ... I can'thelp but think that's where your story should lie you know? It's just fascinating, the stuff about the glamour and how the shackles drained her etc. I wonder if you could write from her point of view? That way you could show all that amazing backstory...um...eg: you could write about how she could actually feel the iron draining her energy/magic. I dunno. I'd love to know what thoughts go through her mind when the warlord is around, is there any underlying sexual attraction or does she just want him dead? Just a suggestion but this is so good I'd be so disappointed if you stopped before you expanded on what for me is the actual story, you know? It's just brilliant and so creative. yeah, want more hehe.
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July 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Review Chapters 1 - 10. Had to read them all.
This is a really good story, your writing is good, and you created great characters. The Warlord (haven't really gotton his name yet) is merciless is his quest for more territory. The Erra (Cadar) seems to be about the only thing he has not been able to capture entirely. However, since she is a warrior like him, she is just as determined as he is. I really thought she was going to get to escape and I really hope she gets a chance to later. I would like to see how the Warlord would be affected by the thought of actually losing something.
What I think is missing is a little more back info. Or maybe I am just missing somethings? When Janth said "3 seasons ago" did he mean 3 years or 9 months? How is Cadar Janth's aunt if he is a Zult and she is a Erra. Why do cold iron burn her? Is she a witch or elf like - there is a reference to her skin "eldritch flesh" - what does this mean? There is also mention of a spark she has ("nascent spark within her"), what does this mean? If she has magic and used "Glamour" on the guards and tried on the Warlord - why hasn't she used her magic again to try to escape?
Looking forward to your next update.
This is a really good story, your writing is good, and you created great characters. The Warlord (haven't really gotton his name yet) is merciless is his quest for more territory. The Erra (Cadar) seems to be about the only thing he has not been able to capture entirely. However, since she is a warrior like him, she is just as determined as he is. I really thought she was going to get to escape and I really hope she gets a chance to later. I would like to see how the Warlord would be affected by the thought of actually losing something.
What I think is missing is a little more back info. Or maybe I am just missing somethings? When Janth said "3 seasons ago" did he mean 3 years or 9 months? How is Cadar Janth's aunt if he is a Zult and she is a Erra. Why do cold iron burn her? Is she a witch or elf like - there is a reference to her skin "eldritch flesh" - what does this mean? There is also mention of a spark she has ("nascent spark within her"), what does this mean? If she has magic and used "Glamour" on the guards and tried on the Warlord - why hasn't she used her magic again to try to escape?
Looking forward to your next update.
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July 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Thank you all for the reviews so far, they have been an inspiration.
In answer to Solitude's questions, most of them in time will be answered. I've deliberately made information about the Erra to be mysterious as the story is primarily from the Warlord's perspective. The Warlord only really know that Erra are tricksters, using glamours to change peoples perceptions of themselves and that they have a vulnerablity to cold iron. It's like poison to them and burns without burning, it drains their powers. Her initial time in the cold iron manacles when she was first recaptured by the warlord had drained her greatly, and other factors are now draining her magical ability so she is hoarding them to prepare. Soon she will become desperate enough to attempt anything to escape. She will get a chance to escape that is coming soon and the ramifications of that event. The nascent spark she felt, will also be explained later in the story.
The anonymity(sp?) of the Warlord stems from the fact that he is only referred by his men as lord, sir or Warlord. When he meets someone of equal rank his name will likely be revealed. Also I must admit at this time, we have not come up with a suitable name for him except for "bastard" hehe
Cedar is Janth's Aunt in the way that a elder female friend of the family is an aunt. Janth's current fate in a mystery that may not be revealed for some time. Once it was obvious that the Warlord could not use that information against the Erra he went another path and will let Janth's fate play out as it will. The 3 seasons is 9 months, the Imperium's conquest of the Zults has been a relatively quick and efficient.
I've not been putting a lot of back story, because it's difficult to write with it just being blocks of boring text, I have tried to bring it up in moments of reflection within the story without it taking over the overall plot. I have actually considered writing a companion piece that is a glossary of the people in the story, but that is also something that would take away from the time to do regular updates of the story and may reveal spoilers before events about to come.
Sesselt and I have planned 3 stories/books set in this world with new characters introduced as it goes on, by the end you should have all the back story you want.
Foerick (author)
In answer to Solitude's questions, most of them in time will be answered. I've deliberately made information about the Erra to be mysterious as the story is primarily from the Warlord's perspective. The Warlord only really know that Erra are tricksters, using glamours to change peoples perceptions of themselves and that they have a vulnerablity to cold iron. It's like poison to them and burns without burning, it drains their powers. Her initial time in the cold iron manacles when she was first recaptured by the warlord had drained her greatly, and other factors are now draining her magical ability so she is hoarding them to prepare. Soon she will become desperate enough to attempt anything to escape. She will get a chance to escape that is coming soon and the ramifications of that event. The nascent spark she felt, will also be explained later in the story.
The anonymity(sp?) of the Warlord stems from the fact that he is only referred by his men as lord, sir or Warlord. When he meets someone of equal rank his name will likely be revealed. Also I must admit at this time, we have not come up with a suitable name for him except for "bastard" hehe
Cedar is Janth's Aunt in the way that a elder female friend of the family is an aunt. Janth's current fate in a mystery that may not be revealed for some time. Once it was obvious that the Warlord could not use that information against the Erra he went another path and will let Janth's fate play out as it will. The 3 seasons is 9 months, the Imperium's conquest of the Zults has been a relatively quick and efficient.
I've not been putting a lot of back story, because it's difficult to write with it just being blocks of boring text, I have tried to bring it up in moments of reflection within the story without it taking over the overall plot. I have actually considered writing a companion piece that is a glossary of the people in the story, but that is also something that would take away from the time to do regular updates of the story and may reveal spoilers before events about to come.
Sesselt and I have planned 3 stories/books set in this world with new characters introduced as it goes on, by the end you should have all the back story you want.
Foerick (author)
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July 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hey, really loving this story. Totally into it. Thanks!