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Sexy but short. When may we see more?

You've got a good story there with "Blanche". You could add to it by fleshing out some details like the ages of the characters to show the age range. Another idea you might want to consider is to use more dialogue to move the story along and let it flow. Young girls getting spanked is always hot too!! Anyway just thought I would put my two cents in.The more you read and write the better you get at, so kep up the good work!! It's tought to write erotica because I always want to get to the "good stuff" but the build up makes it better...sort like literary foreplay. Do you get horny when you write because I do. Anyhow I hope I helped out. Ciao!