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for Envy

by Purerockerchick

person Mariana
schedule October 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ah, the long awaited first time. Something was a little off though, I think, with the characters. Like Paul didn't feel like Paul. But I can't complain about the emotions you put into the chapter though because they were there. Can't wait for the next chapter!
person :)
schedule October 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
those last 2 chapters were amazing, cant wait for more!
person Anon
schedule October 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
AWWWWWWWWWWW that was beautiful... so sweeet
u alwayz leave me wanting more... pleasee update soon
a lil suggestion =)... could u please do a chapter where paul is drunk and very dominating (in a sexy way tho =))
LOL hope to see a chapter SOOON
person Twitch
schedule October 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
The last two lines of Alone Time were awesome. Along with the rest of the chapter, of course. I love this story so much!
schedule October 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I love this story!
The little snippets of their lives is very creative, and sexy!
Of course.... you must know which flashback I hope you write next..... Losing her virginity!!!
I do want to compliment you on your character development as well, I feel like these people are real
and I get to know them through the stories, which makes the whole effect even hotter!
Keep on writing, I love the flashbacks, but anything you write will be great, I'm sure!
Thank You!
Writer11377
person LAMBM
schedule October 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hi!
Your back!!! I’m glad. Keep it coming…
Update soon pleas
person w
schedule October 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
ooh that was really sweet, great chapter!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! =D
person w
schedule October 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
that was hot, great job! =)
person katherine
schedule October 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wow the chap was amazing cant wait for the next one


ps
please try not to disappear again i missed you stories
person Anon
schedule October 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OMG OMG OMG i fuckin LOVED IT
that was too damn good... u leave me wanting more... GOD I LOVE LINDSEY AND PAULL =)
PLEASEEEEEEEEE MOREEEEEEEE
UPDATE SOOOOOOOOOONNNNNNNN PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE