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June 11, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Okay, first things first:
- Proper nouns are capitalized. Always. People's names are proper nouns.
- Please give your story a read-through before posting it. You have a lot of typos resulting in words that do not belong in a sentence changing the meaning.
- Please brush up on your versus you're.
- Numerals do not belong in fiction, especially not in speech. Not small ones like "30". It should be typed out - Thirty.
- Contractions require apostrophes. Otherwise, you end up writing a different word entirely.
- This is not a phone text. u does not belong - ever.
- Please use italics or bold for emphasis, not CAPS.
- Sentences require punctuation. Sometimes at points within the sentence, but always at the end.
I know that's blunt, and perhaps a bit harsh, but those are some basic tips I can give you to help you develop your writing a bit better. I would strongly suggest the read-through, and perhaps that you employ a beta. You have trusted every single time you mean thrust and it makes the story look more trollish than an actual attempt at writing.