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very mean of you to leave it there! needless to say but hope you update soon

That was frightenly amazing! I can't wait for an the next chapter!

I need more! This chapter was amazing. I melted when the Raiser described to Alex exactly what Alex was there for.

I loved the fact that Raiser is shorter and younger(in appearance) than Alex. Its an interesting picture.

Yes, you succeeded very well. I was expecting a dark haired, nicely muscled and tanned bodied MAN. This is different from the other stories I have read. The seme is always taller and muscular. Yup, definitely different.

Keep those chapters a-comin'.

Hi! Just started reading your fic- I really like it! Great writing and fascinating characters. I expected the king to be have a sort of "pretty face" from your previous slight descriptions of him, but I was definitely surprised at him looking so young to Alex and being so much shorter then him, though I believe it makes things more interesting so good choice :)

I'm really looking forward to reading more!

Man i was really suprised abaout Raissers look... I imagened a 6 foot someting tall kinda guy with really toned body. XD lol.
But wait.. does that mean that Raiser is uke??
Thanks for the update!!

Hmmm, you need to be poked a couple of times in a couple of places. Repeatedly.

Hmmm, what can I say? You have taken the time to really point out that the realm that our little pet has found himself is so different from his own. Wind servants? How cool is that!! I'm making the assumption that the short little gobby things were the rain and the giants were the lightening? Interesting, never took the time to consider what elements of a storm would look like in corpeal form.

Now for your little boy perv. Yummy. Shorter, younger, stronger and more powerful. What a seme. So..I take it the favor that is owed is going to be paid in currency that little stormcloud isn't going to like. I had a wicked idea...why not have the little sex boy wearing a peekaboo cloud? Huh huh huh? Nudge nudge, wink wink. Oh...ever mind me...I'm a perv. Of course it probably wouldn't be sexy, it would end up looking like millions of little cotton balls glued to his ass.

I'll leave you to tantalize us further.

Kiix

Wow. Amazing story- the characters, the setting, the descriptions- they've hooked me, for sure. And I was slightly surprised by Raiser's apperance, at least him being shorter than alex. I expected him to be tall and dominant looking and all those predictable things- so thanks for the sexy surprise.

Lovely writing style- it's awfully hard to find writers who can write well. It makes the story 10x more enjoyable. Please update soon, that cliffy was a bitch.

It's hard to put into words what I think of this story. To start with, I must say it reads like a published novel, and I have no doubt that once you finish you would be able to get it published.

I've given up my expectations from most of the original fics on AFF net but this fic of yours gave me some of those back. It's strikingly well-written, something I continue to be shocked by even as I keep reading. As for AUs, I have to say you have a talent for depicting them. There is a fine line, when you are describing another "world" so to speak, between giving your reader so much information that it overwhelms them or not enough that they become confused, and you are spot on in finding that balance.

I was pleasantly intrigued from the very beginning, but not lost. I greedily ate up all the new information you teased us with, but it was never oppressive. You've fleshed your characters out remarkably well considering it's only been two real chapters and I love how three-dimensional they seem to be even now. There are more than a few mistakes regarding spelling and grammar and the like, but for the first time in a long time I just cannot bring myself to care. The story is just THAT engrossing.

It inspires a lot of things in me: curiosity most of all because I really, really want to see where you take it; pleasure because your descriptions are startlingly vivid and well-written; satisfaction, because it's moving along at *just* the right pace, and excitement because I'm... well, I'm impatiently waiting for the smut, to be honest. Lol.

On that topic (my bad, this review's turning into an essay!) I for one was not expecting the Storm King's size or age at ALL. Call me brainwashed from all the cliche fics I've been reading, but I was expecting a tall, handsome blonde man... you know. King-like. But a surprise at is, it is a very pleasant one. I'm looking forward to how you build the dynamic between them, (top, bottom, dominant, submissive? I rather like the thought of the King topping from the bottom, actually...) and how you explain Alex's reactions to what happens next.

...so, in other words, continue? Haha. Waiting for the next, much love.

Ella

good start please continue