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Ugh!!

Love the update but don't trust Al-Aera at all!

Thanks for the series of updates. Very nice watching the scenes unfold, the mystery of the change and the political backstory. Thanks!

Are we reaching the climax of this story?? I am so anxious to see what happens next...hope this story continues forever! =)

I can't agree with "nivell" more! I, too, wish this story never ends! I have simply become addicted to it! I mean to all of them!

Today I found myself reading November again! Of course the parts that invovle Tiger and Miljan! I think I have read these parts 5 times already! I wish you would right more on these two! They are sooooooo sweet! ^_^

Anything from Ghali?! I'm still curious to see how has everything went with him and the Sheikh?!

I one more thing:

I really wanna know that what have happened to Cady, after this incident?! I mean it's interesting to know how he has been punished!!! :D mostly it was his fault that Ghali got kidnapped! O.O

Let us know ;) and update soon.

I hope all of our pairs end up ok at least; thanks for the update!

Hi Kabi,

Just finished reading 46 chapters back to back! What a relief!!! :D now I have read all of your fics! ^_^ and I can only say: WOW!!! O.O

Really chapter after chapter and got more amazed in how talented you are! how strongly this fics have been written!

When you start reading August, you think it's just a fic, telling the tale of different people, but as it goes on and on, you see that eventually every one is going to be connected some how! O.o I mean just thinking about that you have planned all of these beforhand, makes my eyes go round and round! @.@ ! :P !

and God!!! It's getting intenser and intenser as it goes on! and I can't , in no way, predict what's going to happen next! O.O

Right now, I really really wants to know what have happened to Ghali and how he is doing?! Who is the Sheikh and how he is treating Ghali?! Ahh, what a fate! :( he was ok just the morning and by afternoon ... :( He was in love with Anders and now he is with someone that he doesn't even know! kidnapped, alone, frightened ...

Poor Anders! ...

Poor Cadi ...

Poor Phidias who's not going to have a calm life again ever!

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Now my favorite character, Ivan Kosin! :D
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let me write in another review! I know I talk a lot! :P bear with me! ;)

Now, first about August and Ivan and Henrik:

I really wanna know how close Ivan and Henrik have been?! I mean just being lovers, doesn't explain why Ivan knew about Phantom?!!! O.o

Henrik told Phidias after all this time and for a reason! so how come he went and told Ivan about something so important!!!???

Or is it/was it part of Ivan's job to knew about it?!

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Now, putting August aside, when I started reading Ivan Kosin, with out knowing anything!!!, I assumed that Henrik was a bastard and Ivan was an Angel and ... lol I know, I know, don't laugh at me! :P

But I think it is good to put some input about the incident in the wedding! I mean I didn't know how Ivan was turned until I read August! chapter 20 or 22!

So if you don't want to copy paste what had happen before, my be some flash backs are good to add! about how he treated the carriers before and ...

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Ok, my opinion has been changed! Oh make to mistake! :D I still love Ivan ^_^ but ... but ... reading everything, knowing what he has done, to Jesse, to Phidis, to Cadi, and God knows how many more carriers, I think he had it very easy! too easy!

What Henrik did to him was great! I mean you are great! bringing some one so high, too low! but you know what?! (I know I'm so twisted in mind :P but) I'd like him suffer even more! having a Husband such as Mal is not fair for him to be treated soooo well! I mean I really love to see him laughing and happy at the end! :) but right know I prefer to see some one from his past, some one that he hurt, and also some one with power over him right now, hoomm, maybe a guard or ... , who would like to pay back some of the things that Ivan had done to him! :D (evil grin)

When Ivan was torturing Phidias, I was imaging scenes witch their roles were change!

but at the end I like to see Mal saves him! :D but really, how come Mal hasn't search and see what Ivan was before?! that would certainly help in understanding Ivan! and why he need's to be hurt! and he couldn't have this relationship willing! and why he can't enjoy it!

I also like to read some flash backs from his childhood, the bad memories! :D

and maybe some flash back from torturing sessions that he had! :P

Or maybe seeing him back to CEC and treating badly! truly badly! by officers and carriers! maybe in the far away corridor! a little bit beaten! and perhaps Mal finding him and take care of him later!

lol

OK, I know, If I go on a little bit more, I will ruin your story totally!

But what can I do?! I have a wild imagination and this habit to continue what ever I have read at night time in my bed!!! and when you update late :D my imagination will get wilder and wilder! :P

Anyway, thanks for sharing these fantastic, brilliant fics of yours with us!

and well, I can't wait until you update! *.*

Love you,

R

Ok, I promise this is the last one! :P I think I talked your head off! but I sense some thing and thought that maybe it is useful to say it! :)

I saw that you are trying to use different languages in your story! Russian, Spanish, ... , and finally Arabic!

I don't know if you intended to use 100% pure Arabic or not, but I saw a few words that are not Arabic! Being a Persian, I studied Arabic in middle and high school and knew a little bit of the language! and being almost surrounded by Arabic countries, tehre are certain words that have been entered to Persian, but very few went to the other side! :I

Of course, I saw that in your world the Arab union is spread to Russia, which means it contain Persia as well, and that could explain the use of Persian words in your story, but being in Ghatar, I think, it's better to use pure Arabic!

The word "baba" in 100% Persian and it's the informal word for father witch 99.9% children use to call their fathers! It's not Arabic!

The word "Sahel" could be Arabic or Persian, in Arabic use as a name only but in Persian in mean shore/beach.

The name "Madi" id misspelled, I mean that's a name and you can use what ever you like, but the correct Arabic way to write/pronounce it is "Mahdi" and in Persian it is "Mehdi" as well as "Mahdi", it really depends which city you are in! It's just the matter of accent but you certainly missed a "H".

The name "Ghali" is mostly used as family name, not the first name! The first name can be "Gholi" which is a rare name and it's not being used nowadays!

One more thing I can recall is when Ghali was talking to Henrik and he wanted to say "yes, sir" in Arabic, which I think the second word was misspelled. the correct dictation is: "na'am, Seyyedi" or "na'am, ya Seyyedi". I think you wrote it as seyeddi but the stress is on "y".

lol

Anyway, just want you to know; and if you need help in Persian or Arabic you can ask me. I would be glad if I can help. My email is:
roya7777 at yahoo dot ca

and sorry if I can't express what I want to say! I know my English sucks! @.@

Well, it's 3 in the morning and have to be in university early morning! T.T

I will come and bug when you update again! ;) :D

R

I'm glad I caught this update; I worried I'd miss it with all the post having August as the month... I don't think I like Henrik putting Phidias/baby in danger by making shady deals but they seam to be surrounded by enemies; hope they end up ok- thanks for the update!

Ahh, I hope Ghali is okay!! I wanted so badly for him to be with Anders..oh man, you're killing me here. But I'm so glad you updated! I keep checking every day or so to see if you update and you did today! I am soo happy!! Can't wait to read more~