rate_review Reviews

Another home run as far as writing goes! Please...i'm begging you...you have to HAVE TOO right another story. Please I Want More!

Alright now that my initial excitement over this story has worn off let me give you an actually critique.

Good Points: The story is very descriptive and there a very very few grammar slip ups which i really appreciate in a story. The language you use is compelling and keeps you reading (as if the hotness wasn't enough but still.) Your characters are good and you're able to develop them decently even in a one shot like story.

Things in need of improvement: There isn't much to say here because i'm very pleased with all of your work. The only thing that i have to say really is that your ending was very abrupt and it didn't feel like it had the same care put into it as the rest of the story. It just felt rushed. Also i'd like to see you do a longer story rather than just a sexy one shot but that's not really a critique it's just a hope. lol

Keep Writing I love your work!

oooooooooooooohthat was good. And how lovely he was so respectful to her

more, please :)

Doesn't seem that people are very generous over here with the reviews. I'd really like to see more please :)