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ahhh!
Yayness for Brom's secret being revealed!
I thought it was something like that haha!
But you made me wait forever for it grrr!
Ugh Malec shooting himself made me feel sick, I'm so squeemish!
Poor Avery..I feel sorry for her being stuck in between their fight haha
but good on her for shooting the gun! That sure got their attention!
Maybe Malec and Brom can learn to share?=P
Loved it!
Reike x

a,

What was the :( for? Did you dislike the first chapter and stop, or another chapter? Was that due to plot, pace, characterization, POV, voice or construction? Did you read all of it and just now review on the latest chapter? If so, could you run through the elements mentioned above and tell me what you specifically disliked? Sorry, I'm not psychic. And, I would like to know.

BH,

Brom is like human plus uber badass.

GS and Michelle,

Glad it hooked you and made you jump up and down.

Reike,

How do you get through my crap being squeamish? Funny. Yeah, Avery had to do something to break that shit up.

Next chappie will make panties fall off. I have cooked up something yummy.

KD

Hello.

It has to be said that this is an amazing story. Your smut is sensual and smooth rather than forced and rough, i love it! :)When Avery confessed to Malec that she had feelings for both men it brought a tear to my eye.
If only it happened more often that stunning, strong, dominant men came and swept you off your feet in real life eh?

Seriously there is nothing to be changed about this story. Just keep writting as you are, bad comments you can forget because they are all wrong.

Hope all is well for you my dear!
Let me know when you will next update or need some more compliments :P

Lauren.
x

Hope this counts for some 21 reviews :) sorry on behalf of the thousands of reading peeps too lazy to do any sort of reviews. These are the bane of most writers, especially when hours have been spent slaving over screen and keyboard to bring great stories to be life.
Your story is the type of good Christine Feehan-like story, with loads of directions to move around.
Applauds on the great combi on the vampire vs. Van Diesel. I could only conclude that the "heroine" of your story is actually the sub-character and the 2 men are the actual main characters.
Could Ramsay be a born vampire? Your story seems to be moving towards a third party who will 'take care' of Avery's 'prized' virginity, honestly it is a little tiring seeing her play the 2 men to her tune, but a refreshing take nonetheless.
But aiks, it would be great to see some development on the background of the men.
Cheers till then. :)

I was man-bushed for two nights while our daughter stayed with a friend.

This chapter and the next will have everything out in the open. Then more details to come. Heheheh. So to speak.

Gotta work, then have my beta fix the stupid.

flaaaaaa..... what!!!
well that was head spinning.
so Brom's big secret is that he's like wolverine without the metal, very interesting, wasn't expecting that.
can't wait for more! loved it. :)

Enjoying big alpha husband and war shows!

Update tm.

KD

I've just devoured the first nineteen chapters of this delicious bit of fiction, then for the first time in all my years of reading fanfiction, I'm guilt tripped into writing a review.
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The story is beautiful, elegant and flowing. I don't really see why you need me to tell you this. The characters are full, well rounded and mostly believable.(Malec being the most alluring vamp character I've read in a long time.)
The grammar and spelling are first rate, and the descriptions make me want to burn my own pitiful writings.


Is my gushing annoying you yet?

Writers are praise whores. We love gushing. If they say otherwise, they're a liar. ;)

Will definitely be posting tonight.

KD

Another good story. Both men are likable in very different ways. It will be bittersweet to see one of them lose. It will be interesting to see what her research will turn up about the connection with the historical Fitz Gerald women and how Broms investigation ties into things.