rate_review Reviews

Hello, Cute!

Happy to see you and glad you're liking the tale.

KD

i really like this story...its interesting and unique...i wish i had two guys chasin me around!!!!!

Hello and much welcome!

KD

In chapter six you have to change one thing it is driving me crazy, Malec uses the male form of chere he is speaking to a girl so it would be 'Ma chere', now that I think about it you probably just accidently left that off, but I am just telling you anyway cuz I am annoying like that, otherwise this is interesting. Can't wait for the next update.

Wow... can't wait to see what happens next...I'm also not sure which handsome hero I like best... or which one IS the hero, even...you've got me hanging on a wire!

I really love reading the story! It's really, really good! It makes me more excited and ready to read the next chapter! ^___^

Wow, very interesting story and I want to read more. I hope this turns into motivations so you can keep writing on. I love Avery's obliviousness to what happens around her and the effect she has on people. I love her innocense in the sexuality and what it can do to her when she doesn't watch herself. I wonder what will ensue when she lets go of her thoughts and just goes with her desires. Continue on the next chapter. I don't know who I want to root for, but I know the whole vampire love affair is becoming an addiction of sorts and I secretely want to root for Malec, but Brom brings something to the table, that I'm not sure what to make of it.

He is definitely more intriguing than Malec, but I think that is because he doesn't really show an agenda like Malec does.

I cannot wait for more and I'm bookmarking your story just to know when you update. It would be awesome if you could e-mail me a notification when you do so, but that is asking too much.

Cheers.

To start with, this is really intriguing. Of course, it follows the standard lovers-triangle that generally comes with writing romantic vampire fiction but there’s always the mystery of who the main character will chose in the end (granted she usually chooses the mortal or ‘good guy’ but there are always those stories that throw the reader for a loop).
I would have to say that this is fairly well written and shows a great amount of promise with both the character and plot development as long as you don’t end up going all fluff-headed in the future. The attention to detail is also something to be admired since so many works of fiction posted here are lacking in both that and proper language.
Keep writing and more reviews will come as well as more hits.
yours truly,
cope

Nice to hear from you, cope.

I finished the fourth in my erotic historical Garrett family series, and wanted to do something modern. My editor lets me write romance the way I want to, so the twists in this may surprise you. Anyone who has read my novel 'Unleashed' will tell you to strap in for some shocks.

Thanks for the very constructive feedback.

I feel for Avery. You make me care what happens to her, which is hard when all you have is the written word. It's a measure of your talent.