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Please don't tell me he makes her a ghoul.

Very nice chapter! It’s even more interesting now when Jaden is fully awake and can interact with Marcus. :)

I’m not sure if it’s such a good idea to try and bring Lizzie back, she’s already dead so I don’t see how Marcus will be able to do it. I guess I’ll just have to wait and see how it turns out. I hope she doesn’t turn into anything creepy.

OMG! Awesome updates!! I'm sorry I couldn't read before now but anyways... :D

I LOVED IT!!! XDD

It's really horrible what those men did to poor Jaden!!! T___T Really, really cruel! I hope they pay! grr (Go Marcus!) lol

Man, even Jaden's younger past was soooooooo sad! Poor kid!

I really can't wait to read more of this! I'm sure Marcus will be good for Jaden! He's a great man! That's for sure!! ^___^

Thanks alot for the updates!! *hugs*

Poor Jaden, but I’m sure Marcus will take good care of him now. :) I wonder how he will react to being turned into a vampire, I guess that will be quite the surprise for him.

O___O OMFG!!! This is an incredibly FANTASTIC story!!! XDD
It's fabulous! Man, I love Vamp stories! :D And I love even more that Marcus seems to fall for the boy without even having to talk to him! W00T!
I'm glad that the poor guy's getting better!! I hope that Marcus goes watch the DVD soon so he can go send those fucking assholes to HELL!!!! grr
...In other words: Seek & Destroy! LMAO

Anyways, I really can't wait to read more of this! I've had this bookmarked for a few weeks now but I was just too busy to read it... Anyways, now I'm ADDICTED and I want mooooooooooooore!!! XDD :D ehe

Thanks for the great story! *Hugs*

I love to read a new review, just like you, so I guess I should leave one. :) I think it’s a good start to your story, and it’s well-written for being your first! I’ll definitely look forward to the next chapter. I really want to know more about the poor boy, so I hope he will feel better soon and wake up.

Just thought I should tell you that you got a couple of “grasp” in chapter 4 that probably are supposed to be “gasp”, so you might want to change those. Besides that the language looks very good! But maybe I’m not the right person to say that since English is not my first language, lol. Well, anyway, keep up the good work!

heya,
you left a review on the last pure human and I figured I'd pop in and see what you'd written. :-) So far, the poor little abused one sounds very interesting, poor thing. Oh, and to answer your question - no, I didn't abandon the story, LOL. Got myself a nasty concussion, though, and now I have to put my computer in the shop, so it may be a little bit! If you look at my profile though, I have been trying to put up how far along I am on the story, as well as any current news, so hopefully that'll be able to give you a better idea of when the next chapter will be up!

Thanks for the review, by the way!

A novel start, and looking forward to seeing how you develop this. 'Purr

Wonderful job so far. I think I've found my new favorite story. Continue please!!!

Alicia

Very interesting. I bet the kid isn't dead yet. Or is he? Good character development and dialogue. Would be interesting to see where this story goes :)