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March 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
@_@ Usually I'm not a zombie fan but.. what the heck?! I'm really, REALLY enjoying this so far. ( And that's a lot coming from me since I really dislike first-person stories ) I can't wait to read more! Please keep going~!
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March 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh this definitely looks interesting. I've only encountered one other story where a zombie was actually a character, and that was a slapstick comedy piece I found years and years ago on some other site.
I'll be keeping an eye on this one!
I'll be keeping an eye on this one!
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March 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very interesting. You said you were trying to do the dual perspective - I think it's worked quite nicely for this chapter. I'm very curious to read more!
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March 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OH OH OH OH OH! I'm the first reviewer! I think you're doing well! I'm not really a fan of first person, but because you like my work, I am so totally reading yours.
The prologue was good! Being eaten alive *nodsnods* You are very descriptive, but try not to cause your sentences to run on too long. 10-15 words is about normal, anything longer gets repetative. If you NEED (because there are those times) to make it long, try a semi-colon (;) It look super professional *grins* AND it works to break up the sentence without really breaking it up!
Keep up the good work!
The prologue was good! Being eaten alive *nodsnods* You are very descriptive, but try not to cause your sentences to run on too long. 10-15 words is about normal, anything longer gets repetative. If you NEED (because there are those times) to make it long, try a semi-colon (;) It look super professional *grins* AND it works to break up the sentence without really breaking it up!
Keep up the good work!