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April 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
not the best flick out there. It's preeettty amateur. You could work on grammar, and your original voice.
It's good, for pure fluff, and gyrating madness, but nothing else.
So far, it's OK.
It's good, for pure fluff, and gyrating madness, but nothing else.
So far, it's OK.
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April 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
omg i would be sooo pissed if that were me wtf?? but he must seriously have a plan or something right??
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April 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I am going to give you another review because I want a chapter soon. I wonder how this is all going to play out... Ohh, I can't wait!! So go write that chapter!! Oh,and yay, Enfer won!! I think that after Enfer you should do one on Byron, because he's a sexy too. Don't let all that hotness go to waste!
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April 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'm still trying to figure out how your going to end this story with the first chapter being the ending
That was a really cool chapter poor Delancy having two sprits fighting in her head
That was a really cool chapter poor Delancy having two sprits fighting in her head
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April 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
One word...Amazing. Yeah, I loved it. So much tension, I was about to jump out of my seat. I cannot wait to read more.
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April 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i feel so behind in the story, so i stayed up all night and read and omg! it was worth it! sorry for not reviewin in a long time, ive been so sick (im sure close to death, but doctors dont tell you that, do they?) oh well! no worries! im back! and i am not disappointed! WHOO HOO! thank you!!! *jumps up and down insanely* keep writing! the susupense is killin me! im so excited i dont think i can sleep! please! OH PLEASE!!!! keep writing! *kisses your feet* although...im kinda hoping you dont make the story over-dramatic...i mean you are confusing the poor girl with your 'vampires care, werewolves dont' act, pick a side and stick with it! hehe, other then that its all gold! gold i tell ya! *mwah ha ha ha!* wow, i dont think the meds have worn off yet...that or im really tired...anyways....keep writing!
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April 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I would just like to say congratulations on 500 reviews, you quite possibly have the most reviewed and voted for story on the website
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April 22, 2007 at 12:00 AM
WHAAATTT!!!!!!!! YOU CAN'T LEAVE IT LIKE THAT!!!!!!!!!! but anyways, update on the next chapter as fast as you possibly can!
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April 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hey! sorry i havent reviewed in so long, i have been very very sick and unable to even leave my bed, but imagine my extreme joy to find not one but 3 new chapters written. i was so happy i nearly fell out of bed, really. anyways....i like how you did the wolf/vampire fight-thingy and the extremely descriptive character descriptions. which one died? the suspense is killin me...i hope it will last, hehe. by the way...i dont even think you need to ask who everyones favorite character is...you kinda know its gonna be myron, right? well! i think it is anyways! i look forward to what happens next...please keep writing! im counting on you to help me feel better! for the love of the holy land! help me! lol, wow, i think this is my longest review yet. *claps for myself, then looks around, clearing my throat* hm...well...Keep writing! your a genius!
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April 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ok. First. I would like to say that I like this story. I really do. It's a bit on the romance novel side for me, but I still like it. It's cool.
What attracted me to this story was that it was a werewolf story set in modern times. You made them into modern type of men and women that live among us on a daily basis, but are somewhat different. It was this that started to hold my interest. The angsty romance was good too. You're descriptions and visualizations are pretty good and bring a person into the scene. I have noticed though, that sometimes there seems to be a few continuity issues. Not major ones that involve the major plotline itself, but just small things dealing with scene/action descriptions or details ranging from post to post. Incase you are not picking up on these, and I don't know your method of writing, but perhaps make sure that when you write a new post... look back over the previous posts related to the scene and other scenes interacting with it, and make sure that things are flowing well. Also make sure that you have another person read it before posting to pick up on these things and other typo/grammar issues. Believe me, it helps. I learned that the hard way and had to rewrite my first story.
Delancy is a good character and I loved how you introduced her and Myron to us. I also loved how you took the time to introduce Byron and Fallon. The Vampire Court scene was a tad confusing, but eventually I got it. It just seemed like alot going on all at once and the details about people invovled seemed short and quick. Maybe that was your intention, as short quick takes work in film, but it's a bit confusing in stories at times. Still, the vampires did prove interesting. I'm really intrigued by Enfer, but since you started the story in present time with Myron and Delancy together, then I am concluding poor Enfer doesn't get his girl. I'm still very interested in how Myron does get her back. Before he does though, it would be interesting for Enfer to learn what love is truely about. You seem to be well on the road to that realization now. Too bad a wolf had to die in the process, but males are generally protective/possessive of a female they want. Especially if they believe the female wants them.
If you do a side story, I definitely think the best characters would be the vamps. If you write it, I'll probably read it. Past, present, and future events for them would be great. It would be better to explore them in detail in a separate piece. To do anything but a short background section on them in this particular story, would only add confusion since you are already going through events of a flashback nature. Stick to only what is relevant to the immediate storyline. If you need to go into detail about someone's past, keep it short and concise. I believe you managed to do that with Warren, the current Vamp ruler, and Enfer without giving too much away; or paying far too much attention to them.
Otherwise, I just have to say that Delancy is interesting cause she seems to be an ordinary woman put into extrodenary(sp) circumstances; and realizing she's more special than she thought. The guys are HOT! (LOL. Couldn't help that one.) If I found a bunch of guys like that, as animalistic as they all are, I would still have a hard time choosing which one to be with. I definitely like that she's gotten to spend time getting to know each one; not sexually, but emotionally and intellectually. But just a little more sex would be great too. I'm not trying to beg here (oh who am I kidding! Yes I am), but could we PLEASE get a little more sex. Pretty please, with Enfer or Myron on top. ;P
Lastly. On the issue of reviews... I'm a lurker on here most of the time. Mostly reading and rating the stories I like. I have rated yours +++++. I generally don't take the time to review unless I find it pertenent to say something about a post or scene; and I have a tendancy to want to give detailed reviews like this.
Not many people review cause they don't know what to say other than love it or hate it; or they feel they don't have the time to say something lengthy. I have a story in the Star Wars category and I love getting reviews, but I don't stress it. I tend to look for how many hits I have and the ratings received. Granted I would love it if people would comment more on what they like about what's going on in the story, or don't like. Constructive critiques are always welcomed and helpful, but not always done.
To all you readers... it does help if you can at least do it once in a while. Mostly it would help that when you read something, you rate it.
Don't be so hard on them. We are all generally amatures around here and it reflects in the reviews area as well.
Thanks for listening, or not listening, to my rant. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
What attracted me to this story was that it was a werewolf story set in modern times. You made them into modern type of men and women that live among us on a daily basis, but are somewhat different. It was this that started to hold my interest. The angsty romance was good too. You're descriptions and visualizations are pretty good and bring a person into the scene. I have noticed though, that sometimes there seems to be a few continuity issues. Not major ones that involve the major plotline itself, but just small things dealing with scene/action descriptions or details ranging from post to post. Incase you are not picking up on these, and I don't know your method of writing, but perhaps make sure that when you write a new post... look back over the previous posts related to the scene and other scenes interacting with it, and make sure that things are flowing well. Also make sure that you have another person read it before posting to pick up on these things and other typo/grammar issues. Believe me, it helps. I learned that the hard way and had to rewrite my first story.
Delancy is a good character and I loved how you introduced her and Myron to us. I also loved how you took the time to introduce Byron and Fallon. The Vampire Court scene was a tad confusing, but eventually I got it. It just seemed like alot going on all at once and the details about people invovled seemed short and quick. Maybe that was your intention, as short quick takes work in film, but it's a bit confusing in stories at times. Still, the vampires did prove interesting. I'm really intrigued by Enfer, but since you started the story in present time with Myron and Delancy together, then I am concluding poor Enfer doesn't get his girl. I'm still very interested in how Myron does get her back. Before he does though, it would be interesting for Enfer to learn what love is truely about. You seem to be well on the road to that realization now. Too bad a wolf had to die in the process, but males are generally protective/possessive of a female they want. Especially if they believe the female wants them.
If you do a side story, I definitely think the best characters would be the vamps. If you write it, I'll probably read it. Past, present, and future events for them would be great. It would be better to explore them in detail in a separate piece. To do anything but a short background section on them in this particular story, would only add confusion since you are already going through events of a flashback nature. Stick to only what is relevant to the immediate storyline. If you need to go into detail about someone's past, keep it short and concise. I believe you managed to do that with Warren, the current Vamp ruler, and Enfer without giving too much away; or paying far too much attention to them.
Otherwise, I just have to say that Delancy is interesting cause she seems to be an ordinary woman put into extrodenary(sp) circumstances; and realizing she's more special than she thought. The guys are HOT! (LOL. Couldn't help that one.) If I found a bunch of guys like that, as animalistic as they all are, I would still have a hard time choosing which one to be with. I definitely like that she's gotten to spend time getting to know each one; not sexually, but emotionally and intellectually. But just a little more sex would be great too. I'm not trying to beg here (oh who am I kidding! Yes I am), but could we PLEASE get a little more sex. Pretty please, with Enfer or Myron on top. ;P
Lastly. On the issue of reviews... I'm a lurker on here most of the time. Mostly reading and rating the stories I like. I have rated yours +++++. I generally don't take the time to review unless I find it pertenent to say something about a post or scene; and I have a tendancy to want to give detailed reviews like this.
Not many people review cause they don't know what to say other than love it or hate it; or they feel they don't have the time to say something lengthy. I have a story in the Star Wars category and I love getting reviews, but I don't stress it. I tend to look for how many hits I have and the ratings received. Granted I would love it if people would comment more on what they like about what's going on in the story, or don't like. Constructive critiques are always welcomed and helpful, but not always done.
To all you readers... it does help if you can at least do it once in a while. Mostly it would help that when you read something, you rate it.
Don't be so hard on them. We are all generally amatures around here and it reflects in the reviews area as well.
Thanks for listening, or not listening, to my rant. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.