rate_review Reviews

First off I LOVE "Beast's Mate". It's amazing, and now that I've FINALLY made an account I can say so. As far as the Mary Sue thing goes, Delancy is a tiny bit Mary Sue-ish, but its not really bad or anything. Its not blatantly obvious like "MARY SUE ALERT!" because your story and writing is amazing so it fits. It's also hard not to make your character Mary Sue-ish, especially if it works with the plot like Delancy does. The reason shes sorta Mary Sue-ish is because its sort of like "I have two goddess elders in my head, and I'm part Fae, and I'm destined to have sex with two princes. But its so sad because if I do it with the vampire I basically keep him alive since I'm his mate, and if I do it with the werewolf then hes the all powerful leader of the world and its hard to choose". But DON'T change Delancy, she fits with the plot. I totally don't mean to sound like I'm insulting you or anything. Delancy is a Mary Sue-ish character but the story wouldn't work if she was different. So its not a bad thing. So yeah, keep writing because I love your story. (Sorry for the REALLY long review)

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! Not Eric!!!!!!!!
I really adored this guy! This chapter made me sad *tear* but I am anxiously awaiting the next. I feel so sorry for poor Warren! I'm really anxious to see where this is going. OMG! I can't believe those vampires were so starving, but I really can't believe they were so docile! This chapter knocked my socks off, dearie. Congratulations on an excellent installment, and I really hope to see more from you. ADORED IT! Catch ya later!!!!!!

Saraiyu

Reading this letter almost made me cry. I'm so happy that you gained confidence in yourself. You have the gift of story-telling and I am in love with Delancy. Sometimes I feel like I'm her when I read Beast's Mate. I can't wait for more chapters and when the story ends I know I'm going to bawl like a baby, Lol.

You are fan-diddly-tastic!! ^_^

That letter was well said

Ya doll, Del is extremly "Mary Su-ish" its almost sad. But Its still a lovely fic. Being over weight isnt something that stops a person from being a Mary Sue...Its when everyone loves this person. Well almost everyone. Its okay though. Everyone likes MAry Sues. ;-)

Great Story....Please Update Soon!!!! I Couldn't Stop Reading It!!

Honestly, I am on my thirteenth fic on another site, and I think it is absolutely impossible to write your hero of the story without self inserting a little, all of my female leads have aspects of me. Just keep writing and enjoy yourself, Delancy is amazing!

I wouldn't even consider that person's opinion of any importance really... honestly if you look at the review..it says that everyone wanting Delancy would be "a little unlikely." UM. HELLO?!? How many werewolves and vampires do you find hanging around? Isn't THAT a little unlikely??? I'm sorry, but it's your story, your imagination, and if you want Delancy to be a damn sex goddess, that's your prerogative. Why can't people just let other people write their own damn stories these days??? Blech. Okay, I'll stop. But, I will end with this: I think you're doing a great job, so don't let people throwing around veiled insults get ya down.

-F

OK review time - Chapter 19, 21, and 22 were great. Just one after another.

I knew Enfer and Myron were 2 hot good looking men. I mean you have described them before, but how you wrote Delancy seeing them...wow! As the reader we are see these men/man beasts through her eyes, through her wonderment and it was just great. At the beginning I was thinking - OK so they dressed up and they are going to not just look good, but look really good. However, as I read I was wow.... ohhhhh... WOW..... OH MY GOD!!!

Then Chapter 21 - Delancy thinking what she is suppose to do with them. When she started to really think about it - she's right her first time isn't really going to be - what's the word - average. I mean you usually start with 1 other person then work you way to 2. Oh and I wondered if she told them of their linage.

Now Chapter 22 - The ambush. That was just cool. I was actually expecting an ambush earlier, but this was just great. But just say it anit so - Eric - he just couldn't - why would he? I feel so bad for Warren.

OK - I have read about the problem you were having with someone, who was reviewing your story. I have to say I just don't understand it. You had said you were going to change to chapter formating "combine chapters" so it won't be an update, just editing. I am reading a number of stories and a lot of Authors go back over the chapter to fix spelling, grammer, or other things. This puts them at the top - it's not that mean to - I figured that judt happens anytime an Author logged in. Shouldn't she know this? Also, if she either does like your story or grammer or editing process why is she still reading it. Why doesn't she just stop?

I have to say you scared me to death saying you were thinking about leaving. I can not express how happy I am that you are staying and that you are "just done" with the flames. I have been reading this story from the first posting of the first chapter and not only do you deserve to write it, but I deserve to read it.

As for the reviewer saying Delancy is "Mary-Sue", what's that suppose to mean?? I have never heard it - I asked a few people - they have never heard it. Why is it "unliking" it's a FICTIONAL story - anything is possible. Also, I think you need to ask the reviewer what is meant by "self insirted". Right now - that does not sound like a compliment.

About the story itself - I have no clue what's is coming up next, but I can not wait to find out.
Looking forward to your next update.

well personally i thought in the begining that delancy really did in fact resemble a mary sue because she did fit the qualities that a mary sue had but she turns away from that character type after a while.