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March 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
U'rr right, LOL but keep doing it until you get it right. If you liked it... its right!
If it sucks do something about it. Why should we read it, if you tell us it sucks?
If you have what's-her-name, suck him off its suppose to suck. I am not Flaming you, I am telling you like it is, now get back to work and write it right!
G Spot
If it sucks do something about it. Why should we read it, if you tell us it sucks?
If you have what's-her-name, suck him off its suppose to suck. I am not Flaming you, I am telling you like it is, now get back to work and write it right!
G Spot
schedule
March 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
If you tell everyone it sucks how are you going to get people to read it? It was ok, but it was a bit rushed. If you go back over it you can have it more extended like his thoughts while planning it. Then her thoughts more extended out. And having more clothes and taking longer to get naked then strecting out the actual act.