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i wish you would add more to this. i loved this story. please keep up the amazing work and writing

Love the characters! Especially Garshan. I have to admit, I have a bit of a crush on Thrall, (and green dudes in general...don't ask me why) so, y'know!!! Orcs FTW, and half-orcs are even better. Really enjoyed the pace of the story and balance of the characters (the smut was quite nicely smutty as well). I'd be intrigued to read about Garshan even if this wasn't all full of smutty goodness, so that's saying something. :-) Keep up the good work. Looking forward to checking out your other stories. :-)

muy buena historia, ana maria

Nice to have you back!!!

Well done on this story. You have me hooked. Keep going.

And I'm reviewing AGAIN. This really isn't normal for me. I'll vote, if a story is good enough to deserve one, but I only review when my interest is caught. I love AFF but a lot of what's posted is sweet/fun/interesting-but kinda not very good, looking at it from the...is this something that would be published and buyable??? Writing is usually a passion, it's not something people do casually like hmmm, should I write or practice my backhand in tennis? I worked for a midling sized publishing company and even though it was bent towards children, and the Jewish faith-I love the first and have no race, religious, creed or ect issues with basically anyone as long as they aren't coming after me or mine-I know enough about the publishing world to say, if you found the right niche/company, this story is publishable. You write VERY well. I even forgave you the Matron, lol. You just did is soooo nicely!

OK...and one more time...and this IS a record and it's all fawn's fault, lol. (Well I think there were a few other reader comments regarding this-but I just finished one of her stories and I have writer envy so Imma pick on her...bad kitty here! (LOVE her writing!))
The "Matron" issue...there's love and caring between the three wives and the Warlord. You wrote his intimacy with her as understandable, and in sinc with the story. He'll do what he has to do, and yeah, he enjoyed it. But he has a goal and it's been obvious from the start he will do and sacrifice anything so he'd have given the Matron what she wanted to get what he NEEDED to reach his goal.
But I hope you stay with the three wives as his sexual/emotional core-otherwise you're gonna just have a sexual circus and to me at least...if I can't keep track of the players, I stop caring.

Wow...you've done something most can't for me; written a polygamist kinda story that's hot AND loving. I'm a serious romantic-albeit a kinky, twisted, kinda perved one...lol. But this worked for me...there's so much affection and liking between all four characters that it just seems right. You are a wonderful writer. Thanx for the pleasure this story gave me. I normally find a story and read all the chapters presented before I comment, but I made an exception this time. Very, VERY 'licious.

What if Garshan gave the other slaves in his harem their freedom to pursue a monogamous relationship with Annalyssa, whom he begins to love for who she is rather than as a sexual plaything, and she were to become pregnant with his child? Since Garshan half-orc, I'm sure Annalyssa could carry a child one-quarter orc to term that would more take after its mother in human features. That would thicken the plot.

lol I don't get what Anna's problem was, seriously. I mean, she already shares him with two other chicks, what's one more? He was obviously not exclusive and if she didn't like it, she should have laid the smack down on him right from the start and said I don't bloody share! Seriously, I would have hahahahah hehe only joking...sort of lol. Anyway, nice update. I like how she was flipping out about the Matron's etiquette training being in question. I giggled at that.