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This is a fascinating story! Please update soon, you left it on a cliffhanger from hell..

Wow. It's very rare to get such an interesting and personal narrative on this site. Both of the women are intriguing, and so is the plot. I only know about multi-personality disorder from a book called 'The Three Faces of Eve.' Only in that book the woman wasn't aware of her other personalities and she would go into a coma like state before the personalities took over and completely changed her. I'm not sure if this happens for every MPD because they're so rare.
Your writing style is very professional and creative, I really love it. Other authors on this site could take advice from you. I say professional because the narrative is like that one would read in a published book.
I could absolutely put myself in Mrs. Johann's shoes. I like her obsessive cleaning behaviour, it's a nice quirk.
As for Mr. Sable, his intentions are confusing. But he definitely seems like a character that can be developed. as does Mrs. Johann. I look forward to where this story goes. I think your talent would be wasted on a one-shot or a PWP so I hope whatever sex does happen happens in context of the characters being ready. A lot of authors will just put sex in their stories for the sake of sex.
-Cara

this story is wonderful and original. I feel as if its deeper than most stories I read on here so it quickly becomes something that sticks out. update soon I'm excited go see how far maria takes over

This. Was. The. Best. Story. Ever. I'm dying to see what's going to happen between the two. This was so wonderfully written and made so much sense, I have so much respect for you as a writer after reading this, it's pure GENIUS. Although I'm not really into guys with curly hair, it was very easy to relate to your characters! (especially the lean cuisine and lonliness! lol story of my life!) Keep on writing, girlfriend, I'll be reading and reviewing, most definitely!

I'm definetly liking it so far and I'm curious about how Maria has two sides to her. Also Mr. Sable looks like he has some other hidden motives... I'm looking forward to this story :).

very interesting!