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February 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Happy you updated and I think it is better that her wings popped out instead of them having a conversation, because now she is forced to explain herself. Can't wait for the next update.
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February 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
'Slice-em-up range', gotta love that, happy to see the update and can't wait for the next one.
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February 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It's a good start, looks very promising :)
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February 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
^_^ You don't need to be nervous, I think the story was great. Its just, well i don't know if it was me spacing or not, but i think you should give a better description of the guy, all i got from him was that he is old(how old?) and that he had silver eyes. But for a first story, I think it was great ^^. Please update soon
Thank You!
Ja-Ne =^_^=
Thank You!
Ja-Ne =^_^=
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February 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I think an author should already be enthusiastic about their work too, but I also know that when you are insulted it is hard to enjoy writing. I like it though, it is interesting. Maybe in the next chapter we could find more about Shuey's life, I don't know if you already said it but did she spend all her life in that room, did she go to school or anything. And ooh demon (hopefully) hotel manager, very nice. Please update soon.
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February 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow. I don't review works very often, but this one... this one is a must continue. I do like Shuey's guarded nature as well as her predictaments with being an outcast in the world. It fits well the the kind of upbringing you mention her having living with someone you knows dislikes you. Keep it up.